New Original "Hello, Goodbye"

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New Original "Hello, Goodbye"

Unread post by mattinbeloit » Sun Sep 24, 2006 6:14 pm

I wrote this Friday night and I just finished it in the studio a few minutes ago, it's called "Hello, Goodbye". Let me know what you think...

http://www.sendspace.com/file/jkkrhl

-edit- I just realized this is the name of a Beatles song also. What can I say, I didn't know....
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Unread post by Cor » Sun Sep 24, 2006 6:35 pm

I like once it starts to get going. The vocal melody is good, I like it already, but I think it would grow on me even more. I like the guitar's melody, too.

Good job.
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Unread post by dmbvideos » Sun Sep 24, 2006 7:49 pm

The guitar reminds me a little of "Light Lift Me Up"

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Unread post by mattinbeloit » Sun Sep 24, 2006 8:12 pm

dmbvideos wrote:The guitar reminds me a little of "Light Lift Me Up"
Ya, we were discussing that the other day when I came up with the rift, I made a thread about it.
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Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Sun Sep 24, 2006 8:55 pm

Yeah, this is pretty much Light Lift Me Up. (and it's "riff" :))

I'd suggest not panning the track so hard.
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Unread post by TimmyJ4140 » Mon Sep 25, 2006 12:50 am

I like the song, I'm a sucker for simplicity. However, I'm not a fan of how the guitar sounds. Ehh, to each his own. Rock 'n roll dude.
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Unread post by Appfro » Mon Sep 25, 2006 3:25 pm

i liked it. the guitar was really affective in it's simplicity. i love moving bass notes like that. i feel like it was a step backwards for your voice though from the last one. not that you missed notes or anything, cause you were probably 100% on that. just that it sounds too tight, too uptight. my only critique would be to loosen up a bit when you sing and it'll be perfect.

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Unread post by mattinbeloit » Mon Sep 25, 2006 4:07 pm

Appfro wrote:i liked it. the guitar was really affective in it's simplicity. i love moving bass notes like that. i feel like it was a step backwards for your voice though from the last one. not that you missed notes or anything, cause you were probably 100% on that. just that it sounds too tight, too uptight. my only critique would be to loosen up a bit when you sing and it'll be perfect.
Ya, and for some reason I tend to loosen up the more I play something, but that's a good point, thanks. You need that loosness for this kind of song.
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Unread post by bassman462 » Mon Sep 25, 2006 5:03 pm

I think it was better as a paul mccartney song.
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Unread post by mattinbeloit » Mon Sep 25, 2006 6:28 pm

bassman462 wrote:I think it was better as a paul mccartney song.
How can I compete with that...
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Unread post by bassman462 » Tue Sep 26, 2006 4:20 pm

mattinbeloit wrote:
bassman462 wrote:I think it was better as a paul mccartney song.
How can I compete with that...
you can't.
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Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Tue Sep 26, 2006 4:59 pm

I don't know man. This seems like a direct lift from Light Lift Me Up. Even the vocal melody is really similar. Poor form.
If I remember correctly, didn't you do something similar like copy a verse from someone who posted a song here?

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Unread post by Appfro » Tue Sep 26, 2006 5:01 pm

Trippin Hillbilly wrote:I don't know man. This seems like a direct lift from Light Lift Me Up. Even the vocal melody is really similar. Poor form.
If I remember correctly, didn't you do something similar like copy a verse from someone who posted a song here?
sorry for the hijack, but me and sarah now live in the same city and are thinking of starting a band. sooooooooooo....you should move to NC and start it w/ us.

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Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Tue Sep 26, 2006 5:14 pm

Trippin Hillbilly wrote:I don't know man. This seems like a direct lift from Light Lift Me Up. Even the vocal melody is really similar. Poor form.
If I remember correctly, didn't you do something similar like copy a verse from someone who posted a song here?
Yes, but he claimed it was an accident... :?
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Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Tue Sep 26, 2006 5:16 pm

Appfro wrote:
Trippin Hillbilly wrote:I don't know man. This seems like a direct lift from Light Lift Me Up. Even the vocal melody is really similar. Poor form.
If I remember correctly, didn't you do something similar like copy a verse from someone who posted a song here?
sorry for the hijack, but me and sarah now live in the same city and are thinking of starting a band. sooooooooooo....you should move to NC and start it w/ us.
I'm packing..

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