New original: All We Want..

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New original: All We Want..

Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Sat May 14, 2005 5:28 am

Here ya go, it's a little different from my usual so critique the hell out of it.
It's a simple little song.

All We Want

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Unread post by GreedylilPig » Sat May 14, 2005 8:23 am

Very enjoyable, Miguel. Excellent quality recording. The levels on the guitar and your voice are just about perfect. You have a voice all your own. The only critique I have on your vocals is that the 2nd "all this time" in the chorus comes off a little flat to me (2:39-41). The back-and-forth vocals (after that 2nd chorus) were just fine but I think the song would benefit from remaining just a straight shot, so to speak, of you and the guitar all the way through. Just an instinct. The guitar was excellent. You have great rhythm and this song reminded me a little bit of Jason Mraz's style. All in all, another great work, Miguel. Keep it up. Quick question: how do you feel it's a little different from your usual music?
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Unread post by mangold » Sat May 14, 2005 8:40 am

I get so excited when i see that you or brian or pat has posted something new. This didnt dissapoint. Truly terriffic. I cant think of anything id change or add.
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Unread post by taylordb » Sat May 14, 2005 9:09 am

I second Andy's thoughts.

Damn Miguel....I feel like a turd sometimes because every time I hear your stuff I think "God he makes me feel good when I listen to him" and then I post stuff like "great job Miguel..I love your stuff"..........then Brian posts these great critiques and I think "why can't I come up with stuff like that?"

Oh well, I rambling...but really Miguel, I love your stuff...keep the faith cause you have a future in music my friend.
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Unread post by Kahn » Sat May 14, 2005 10:03 am

Awesome job. I love the buildup and the cool ending.

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Unread post by Appfro » Sat May 14, 2005 3:36 pm

it took way too long for you to post another original :) great song man. not my favorite of yours, but definetly awesome. very cool rhythm. i have nothing negative to say about it at all. great guitar and as always great voice. good job man.

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Unread post by GreyBlueAnt » Sat May 14, 2005 5:57 pm

on second thought, don't get a recording contract, cause i love the fact that i can get all your music for free.
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Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Sat May 14, 2005 8:14 pm

Firstly, thanks to everyone for the kind words. It's always good to hear. :D
GreedylilPig wrote:Very enjoyable, Miguel. Excellent quality recording. The levels on the guitar and your voice are just about perfect. You have a voice all your own. The only critique I have on your vocals is that the 2nd "all this time" in the chorus comes off a little flat to me (2:39-41). The back-and-forth vocals (after that 2nd chorus) were just fine but I think the song would benefit from remaining just a straight shot, so to speak, of you and the guitar all the way through. Just an instinct. The guitar was excellent. You have great rhythm and this song reminded me a little bit of Jason Mraz's style. All in all, another great work, Miguel. Keep it up. Quick question: how do you feel it's a little different from your usual music?
Brian, you're right, that second chorus might be a little flat. Thanks for pointing that out, I have no excuse for it. :lol:
The reason I said that it's something a little different from me is that it's about me and my girlfriend and just about how good things can be when we just do our own thing and be excellent to each other as your sig says....
It's not often that I write lyrics in that sort of mindset so it was a change for me. I suppose musically it's not much change from my norm.
taylordb wrote:I second Andy's thoughts.

Damn Miguel....I feel like a turd sometimes because every time I hear your stuff I think "God he makes me feel good when I listen to him" and then I post stuff like "great job Miguel..I love your stuff"..........then Brian posts these great critiques and I think "why can't I come up with stuff like that?"

Oh well, I rambling...but really Miguel, I love your stuff...keep the faith cause you have a future in music my friend.
:lol: Awesome!
GreyBlueAnt wrote:on second thought, don't get a recording contract, cause i love the fact that i can get all your music for free.
:shakes fist:

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Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Tue May 17, 2005 5:09 pm

Umm, so anyone else listen to this?

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Unread post by EnFuego » Tue May 17, 2005 10:08 pm

miguel, I'm with taylordb. Great song, but i feel like a wiener responding because I have nothing insightful to say. Great job on this one. Keep the originals coming, this is another one of yours to add to the IPod.

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Unread post by Speenis » Tue May 17, 2005 11:42 pm

I probably won't listen to this just because its gonna make me want to bash my guitar into pieces.
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Unread post by mangold » Wed May 18, 2005 1:40 pm

BigSpeen3436 wrote:I probably won't listen to this just because its gonna make me want to bash my guitar into pieces.
miguel touches so many people
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Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Wed May 18, 2005 3:55 pm

praisedave wrote:
BigSpeen3436 wrote:I probably won't listen to this just because its gonna make me want to bash my guitar into pieces.
miguel touches so many people
!!!!!!!!!! :lol:

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Unread post by Speenis » Wed May 18, 2005 6:00 pm

Joking aside, I listened to this and thought it was great. As others have said, I'm real surprised you don't have record deal yet. You're voice, as always, was amazing.
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Unread post by MWR » Wed May 18, 2005 7:22 pm

Great as always. I like the verse riff a lot. The chorus/prechorus is heading in the right direction but it's not quite there. I think the melody needs some tweeking.
Recording quality is awesome. That new mic is definately coming through. Sounds nice and crisp but not brittle at all. I want one dammit!
Last comment is on the vocal overdubs...get rid of them. They sound really jumbled. I think a simple two or three part harmony would've worked much better.

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