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Original:"Here I am, Crying"

Unread post by brian_ok » Fri Feb 11, 2005 6:09 pm

I just started a band with one of my friends. We are both named Brian, thus our band name, The Brians. This is our first song, inspired by one of our friends who has a great life but is always depressed.

Throughout the song, we meet an average American- (at least, average where we live.)- he has a family, goes to church but is not necessarily religious, and most importantly, realizes something is missing from his life.

The song has a somewhat religious overtone, but by no means is it Christian music.

Also, we didn't mean for this song to be really deep or really funny. Take it for what it is!

Enjoy, please listen and comment, either here or on dmusic, or both!

http://thebrians.dmusic.com

(click the orange circle/arrow next to the song)
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Unread post by HCHaikuWarrior » Fri Feb 11, 2005 7:01 pm

thats almost as creative as the dave matthews band
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Unread post by guitardmb » Sat Feb 12, 2005 10:26 am

Your vocal sounds good but i dont think your singing from your diaphragm. It would sound a lot better if you did that.

Plus turn up the vocal and the recording would sound really really good.

awesome though.

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Unread post by Elliottman » Sat Feb 12, 2005 10:41 am

wow really good. enjoyed it allot. especially if the quaility was better?
you got the tab, i would nt mind having a go at that bad boy! :D
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Unread post by hmm69 » Sat Feb 12, 2005 10:54 am

it sounds kind of like a spoof of a barenaked ladies song

cool though
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Unread post by brian_ok » Sat Feb 12, 2005 1:58 pm

HCHaikuWarrior wrote:thats almost as creative as the dave matthews band
#41.
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Unread post by You_Enjoy_Myself » Sat Feb 12, 2005 2:22 pm

I thought it was pretty good, but definitely room for improvement. One thing I really liked was the little lead guitar runs, they really added something nice to the song. I also liked the way you guys kinda traded vocals back and forth, that was somewhat bnl-ish, which is good in my books. But yeah, the quality could be a little better, but as far as the actual song, it was good. Keep posting.
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Unread post by brian_ok » Sat Feb 12, 2005 3:27 pm

You_Enjoy_Myself wrote:I thought it was pretty good, but definitely room for improvement. One thing I really liked was the little lead guitar runs, they really added something nice to the song. I also liked the way you guys kinda traded vocals back and forth, that was somewhat bnl-ish, which is good in my books. But yeah, the quality could be a little better, but as far as the actual song, it was good. Keep posting.
thanks! what's 'bnl-ish'? (a band, I assume, but which one? :? )
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Unread post by Beauford33 » Sat Feb 12, 2005 3:28 pm

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Unread post by brian_ok » Sat Feb 12, 2005 3:34 pm

Beauford33 wrote:bare naked ladies
thanks. nice avatar, by the way!
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Unread post by brian_ok » Sat Feb 12, 2005 4:55 pm

hmm69 wrote:it sounds kind of like a spoof of a barenaked ladies song

cool though
which song? we both think that we've heard a song with a similar chord progression, but neither of us listen to the barenaked ladies that much.
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Unread post by hmm69 » Sun Feb 13, 2005 11:57 am

idk they all sound alike but dont get me wrong i love the bare naked ladies there fuckin awesome in concert your voice just reminded me of them plus the harmony singing i said it sounded like a spoof cause of the lyrics and never say "sucks" in a song if you want to be taken seriously
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