#41 Instrumental Cover

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Unread post by mbgreen » Mon Apr 07, 2003 4:38 pm

I like the melody you have going with the lead. Vocals?! Lets hear em!! As far as improvement, there are several spots where the rythm was off (between the lead track and rythm track, see about the 1:00 mark to see what I'm talking about) and the guitars seem to get a little jumbled together in the beginning intro riff. Other than that though it was pretty good.
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Unread post by billywestom » Mon Apr 07, 2003 4:46 pm

i definately noticed what you are talking about in the intro...a little too much of everything....i haven't listened to this in a while, so now i am hearing the imperfections...i see what you are meaning by the off timing, just a little...as far as vocals, eventually... :wink:
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Unread post by firedancer86 » Mon Apr 07, 2003 4:54 pm

I loved it...the only flaw where i can suggest improvment is the lead in the first verses...pluck 1,2,1,3...as opposed to 1,2,3...squeeze it in and the rhythmn should be the same...

here is more of what I am saying...

e--------------------10--------------------------
b---------8-------------------------------------
g----7--------(7)----------------------------------

if you need me to clear that up more, I can try a little harder... :?

Besides that, I think it went smoothly and cool...kudos :wink:
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Unread post by billywestom » Mon Apr 07, 2003 5:03 pm

i see what you mean, thanks
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Unread post by Xoosh » Mon Apr 07, 2003 5:12 pm

i've not had time to read responses so im sure im being repetetive, but i wanted to give it a listen...

at around :25 seconds and :31 seconds the guitars get a lil busy at :55 through 1:04 the second guitar goes a little fast. It sounds like you're trying to record a second guitar without turning the volume up loud enough to hear the first guitar ;) the solo that ends at 1:33 sounds very nice. a lil loud but that's just a mixing difference. Bass run at around 2 minutes is a lil off.. but it works...

overall it needs work. BUT overall it is quite good. I get the feel you definitely realize it's an instrumental song... and you keep that in mind the entire time that you are recording which is a lot more then most instrumentalists understand (amateur ones rather)... this is something i struggle with as a specificly instrumental only musician...

(to me) this is something to be proud of, but not something to say "ok im done" :)

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Unread post by billywestom » Mon Apr 07, 2003 5:56 pm

thanks xoosh for the response...i did this a while ago, it is just now starting to come back.. :shock: i know about the guitars getting "busy" hehe just too much..thanks for your overall response
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Unread post by billywestom » Mon Apr 07, 2003 6:00 pm

btw xoosh....you know anything about the problem with getting email notifications of replies on the boards? i havent been getting any...is it a problem here or my hotmail or are you clueless..
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Unread post by Xoosh » Mon Apr 07, 2003 6:55 pm

are you checking "notify me when a reply is posted"? at the bottom of your reply window (above preview)
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Unread post by snoopdoug1 » Mon Apr 07, 2003 7:21 pm

I thought it was good billy, but remember... I have an "untrained" ear :) I wish I could play that well :)

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Unread post by billywestom » Mon Apr 07, 2003 8:27 pm

Xoosh wrote:are you checking "notify me when a reply is posted"? at the bottom of your reply window (above preview)
of course... :wink:
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