New Original

[SRVDMB]

Hey i've been writing a lot of songs lately. Thought i would put one up on my page.

http://www.myspace.com/jackbabineau

Its called "Where is God"

I was sitting after school watching TV and i came across a thing on the History Channel about Slaves. It was very sobering to see what slavery was and I was reminded of the past. So i sat down and just wrote and thats what came out. I had to cut down on some verses. I recorded it last night at WXP 91.3 radio in fitchburg.


Thanks,
Jack

[dmbguitar718]

This is the only original I've heard from you, but your Dave Matthews influence bleeds right into your music. I mean, seriously, this does not sound original at all. The guitar part is so derived from Dave's work that it's hard for me to listen to. It has an extremely weak chorus, too. "Where is God/Where could he be/I don't believe he's above me" Come on. Your vocal delivery and flourishes sound like you're just playing a Dave Matthews song that I've never heard.

Pleeeease, lay off the Dave for a bit and focus on yourself if you're serious about marketing yourself.

[SRVDMB]

This is the only original I've heard from you, but your Dave Matthews influence bleeds right into your music. I mean, seriously, this does not sound original at all. The guitar part is so derived from Dave's work that it's hard for me to listen to. It has an extremely weak chorus, too. "Where is God/Where could he be/I don't believe he's above me" Come on. Your vocal delivery and flourishes sound like you're just playing a Dave Matthews song that I've never heard.

Pleeeease, lay off the Dave for a bit and focus on yourself if you're serious about marketing yourself.

God forbid my greatest influence will bleed into my music! Heres the deal. Play a lot of different styles. Actually I wrote a song thats like a very bluesy SRV feel to it...Then i have a song kinda like G Love Jack Johnson like.....This one happens to be dave like. The chorus is meaning that the slave is questioning the fact if god is even there. Because if all the bad things happening could be happening then god can't be real. So yes Where is God.....I think the chorus will stay. Idc what people think...The chorus speaks to me and thats all that matters. I'm at the point where i don't care about people digging my originals. If i like my own songs and they hit me the right way i just don't care about any one else. Tune in on myspace to hear more originals.....But WIG is definetly not changing

[dmbguitar718]

Well when it's that blatant, it's a problem.

[Banjobach]

The whole song sounds way too "dont drink the water". Even the premise is about an ethnic group that was mistreated. Whether its black slaves or indians, its too similar in my humble opinion. The question posed in the chorus just seems too contrived or cliche. "where is god" is one of those things we've all asked at one point or another, i hope, and to me it just felt like an empty cry, with no real connection behind it.

I dont really know what to do with this one. I feel both parts, guitar and vocals, need to be changed because they sound too dave-like. For me, the more i wrote, the better it became, or at least im under that illusion. Just keep writing and listening to as many different types of music as you can and hopefully you can craft your own sound, not songs that sound like srv blues or jack johnson breathy vocals and barr chords.

[SRVDMB]

The question posed in the chorus just seems too contrived or cliche. "where is god" is one of those things we've all asked at one point or another, i hope, and to me it just felt like an empty cry, with no real connection behind it.

If we all ask it then why is it a problem to be in a song? It only sounds DDTW like because of Drop D. Its all based around D. I feel the connection so thats all the matters.

[Banjobach]

I suppose there's no point in critiquing your song if you wont change anything...

[SRVDMB]

I suppose there's no point in critiquing your song if you wont change anything...

Its nothing against you. I feel good when i play the song....I like the song. Its touches me.....I don't want to change that.....

[Smbabs886]

This is the only original I've heard from you, but your Dave Matthews influence bleeds right into your music. I mean, seriously, this does not sound original at all. The guitar part is so derived from Dave's work that it's hard for me to listen to. It has an extremely weak chorus, too. "Where is God/Where could he be/I don't believe he's above me" Come on. Your vocal delivery and flourishes sound like you're just playing a Dave Matthews song that I've never heard.

Pleeeease, lay off the Dave for a bit and focus on yourself if you're serious about marketing yourself.

Let me tell you somethin i'd much rather see this kid live than you anyday.. I just saw your lilttle video on your pathetic website and let me tell you it was like watchin a bad karaoke night after drinkin. So when you say focus on yourself before you go and market yourself, i think you should reconsider your little web site there. His song may sound a lot like dave matthews, but you know what.. give this kid some time and man he's goin places. At least he can put on a good performance.

[Cor]

I suppose there's no point in critiquing your song if you wont change anything...

Its nothing against you. I feel good when i play the song....I like the song. Its touches me.....I don't want to change that.....

Sometimes music isn't just about you. A musician tries to touch others.

If you only care about how you feel when you play it, it's musical masturbation.

[sunglassesatnight]

This is the only original I've heard from you, but your Dave Matthews influence bleeds right into your music. I mean, seriously, this does not sound original at all. The guitar part is so derived from Dave's work that it's hard for me to listen to. It has an extremely weak chorus, too. "Where is God/Where could he be/I don't believe he's above me" Come on. Your vocal delivery and flourishes sound like you're just playing a Dave Matthews song that I've never heard.

Pleeeease, lay off the Dave for a bit and focus on yourself if you're serious about marketing yourself.

Let me tell you somethin i'd much rather see this kid live than you anyday.. I just saw your lilttle video on your pathetic website and let me tell you it was like watchin a bad karaoke night after drinkin. So when you say focus on yourself before you go and market yourself, i think you should reconsider your little web site there. His song may sound a lot like dave matthews, but you know what.. give this kid some time and man he's goin places. At least he can put on a good performance.

You have obviously not paid any attention to Pat's abilities. And fuck you for it.

And so you're friends with SRVDMB huh?

[dmbguitar718]

This is the only original I've heard from you, but your Dave Matthews influence bleeds right into your music. I mean, seriously, this does not sound original at all. The guitar part is so derived from Dave's work that it's hard for me to listen to. It has an extremely weak chorus, too. "Where is God/Where could he be/I don't believe he's above me" Come on. Your vocal delivery and flourishes sound like you're just playing a Dave Matthews song that I've never heard.

Pleeeease, lay off the Dave for a bit and focus on yourself if you're serious about marketing yourself.

Let me tell you somethin i'd much rather see this kid live than you anyday.. I just saw your lilttle video on your pathetic website and let me tell you it was like watchin a bad karaoke night after drinkin. So when you say focus on yourself before you go and market yourself, i think you should reconsider your little web site there. His song may sound a lot like dave matthews, but you know what.. give this kid some time and man he's goin places. At least he can put on a good performance.

Yesssss. Internet fights.

The video on my website? That was back in high school. It's old, and I know it sucks. It's pretty obvious. We played shitty songs.

I'm not trying to market myself in any way.

I have changed a lot musically since I have touched my website. I haven't put any of my new recordings on there, and the website will expire soon.

My current original material sounds nothing like what you're listening to.

I look forward to your response, I'm kinda bored tonight.

[Smbabs886]

This is the only original I've heard from you, but your Dave Matthews influence bleeds right into your music. I mean, seriously, this does not sound original at all. The guitar part is so derived from Dave's work that it's hard for me to listen to. It has an extremely weak chorus, too. "Where is God/Where could he be/I don't believe he's above me" Come on. Your vocal delivery and flourishes sound like you're just playing a Dave Matthews song that I've never heard.

Pleeeease, lay off the Dave for a bit and focus on yourself if you're serious about marketing yourself.

Let me tell you somethin i'd much rather see this kid live than you anyday.. I just saw your lilttle video on your pathetic website and let me tell you it was like watchin a bad karaoke night after drinkin. So when you say focus on yourself before you go and market yourself, i think you should reconsider your little web site there. His song may sound a lot like dave matthews, but you know what.. give this kid some time and man he's goin places. At least he can put on a good performance.

You have obviously not paid any attention to Pat's abilities. And fuck you for it.

And so you're friends with SRVDMB huh?

His abilities? Are you just as delusional as he is? Clearly he's all studio and can't perform live. All i was tryin to say was there is no need to bash on the kid when your shit isn't all that great either.

Pat when you say your not trying to market yourself, i don't think having a web site really justifies that statement. And when you perform your originals live i'd like to hear them then, cause everything i've seen on the site isn't all that impressive. How long have you been playing?

[Banjobach]

I suppose there's no point in critiquing your song if you wont change anything...

Its nothing against you. I feel good when i play the song....I like the song. Its touches me.....I don't want to change that.....

Sometimes music isn't just about you. A musician tries to touch others.

If you only care about how you feel when you play it, it's musical masturbation.

Not to stray from the internet bickering, but i couldn't agree more with this statement.

[Cor]

I suppose there's no point in critiquing your song if you wont change anything...

Its nothing against you. I feel good when i play the song....I like the song. Its touches me.....I don't want to change that.....

Sometimes music isn't just about you. A musician tries to touch others.

If you only care about how you feel when you play it, it's musical masturbation.

Not to stray from the internet bickering, but i couldn't agree more with this statement.

And SRV, I listened to the tune. It sounds like Dave. The lyrics, while they are a concept that everyone can identify with, don't cover any new ground.