This can either be an album outro/intro of some sort...

[lyrics101]

Or I can bust out the keyboard and guitar again and turn it into an actual song of some sort with, y'know, less ambiguous lyrics and a title.

On the plus, I got to screw around on my friends ondes martenet (sp) and drop it down an octave to make really pretty strings.

http://www.synergizement.com/music/trademark.mp3

[iha]

i think it would make a nice little outro

[RunsWithBuffalo]

Or I can bust out the keyboard and guitar again and turn it into an actual song of some sort with, y'know, less ambiguous lyrics and a title.

On the plus, I got to screw around on my friends ondes martenet (sp) and drop it down an octave to make really pretty strings.

http://www.synergizement.com/music/trademark.mp3

Isn't that what radiohead uses? That's really cool

I think this needs some flushing out. I like that it's ambient and the production is really good. The vocals are cool but your backup gives them a chorusy sound which doesnt work. Maybe experiment a little with those.

What program are you arranging with? Acid? Logic? Reason?

[BenPezzner]

Interesting sound. Maybe turn down the vocals a bit and make them blend in more with the strings?

[lyrics101]

I actually spent a lot of time fucking around in order to get that same chorus quality.

I'm using Garageband.

I turned up the vocals because I've gotten complaints about how they blend in too excessively rather than sitting on top, but I'll try it and see if I like it.