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Unread post by i-am-me » Tue Jan 23, 2007 5:52 pm

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Speenis wrote:Here's a critique of your Two Step video...

It was way too rushed and played a little too hard. It makes a beautiful song sound like a mess. I'm really not sure what you're playing around 0:50 but it didn't sound like it fit. The rhythm on the verse was completely off, sounded way too fast and choppy. I'd also try to play those chords the way they are on this site. It didn't look like you used your pinky at all during the verse, which makes playing the song a lot easier IMO. When you went back to the intro you got a little crazy there :lol: I'd try to take that down about 5 notches. It makes it sound like you're butchering it. The chords you were playing around the 1:35 mark sounded a bit off. Actually the whole part between 1:45 and 2:02 sounded really off, I'm not exactly sure what you were playing there but it sounded very rough.

Overall, the rhythm was way off for most of it. You were also hitting a lot of strings/notes that you shouldn't have. I'd say work on the verse the most, because the rhythm wasn't even close to the way it should be.
i would work on timing and rythm of the other songs before two step, it's a little more complicated imo.
I dunno, I thought Two Step was the easiest rhythm-wise.
lol... i guess its different from person to person
two step kicked my ass when i was learning it. probably one of the hardest for me rhythm wise. (i assume we're talking about the verse).

i think you need to work on your style a little bit. you're just accenting certain chords and notes much more than you should be. relax when you play. slow down...
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Unread post by soright » Tue Jan 23, 2007 6:30 pm

Speenis wrote:Here's a critique of your Two Step video...

It was way too rushed and played a little too hard. It makes a beautiful song sound like a mess. I'm really not sure what you're playing around 0:50 but it didn't sound like it fit. The rhythm on the verse was completely off, sounded way too fast and choppy. I'd also try to play those chords the way they are on this site. It didn't look like you used your pinky at all during the verse, which makes playing the song a lot easier IMO. When you went back to the intro you got a little crazy there :lol: I'd try to take that down about 5 notches. It makes it sound like you're butchering it. The chords you were playing around the 1:35 mark sounded a bit off. Actually the whole part between 1:45 and 2:02 sounded really off, I'm not exactly sure what you were playing there but it sounded very rough.

Overall, the rhythm was way off for most of it. You were also hitting a lot of strings/notes that you shouldn't have. I'd say work on the verse the most, because the rhythm wasn't even close to the way it should be.
Around 0:50 that is a two step. Alternating the open A and open E string while holding/strumming Dm. That's what a Two Step is, that's why I threw it in there, thought it was kind of cool. The other parts are just little variations i threw in that probably sound off if you're used to a normal version.


I'm upset with all the comments on my rhythm! Really I'm not ignorant enough to think my rhythm is fine and you guys just have something wrong with you, so I'm out to prove you guys wrong (by the way I appreciate all the constructive criticism).

I'm gonna post new videos within the week and pay more attention to strumming and such.

thanks again for the time and comments...ill get to work.

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Unread post by Speenis » Tue Jan 23, 2007 6:35 pm

no problem, I just don't recommend drinking any caffeine 12 hours before you record the videos
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Unread post by TylerMoore » Tue Jan 23, 2007 10:40 pm

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haha, you did stare it down pretty heavily on the stone. I havent really taken the time to learn that song yet, but you did pretty well from what I can see.
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Unread post by Easy E » Tue Jan 23, 2007 11:37 pm

i think some of you (mangold) would be better served to just post audio recordings
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Unread post by mangold » Wed Jan 24, 2007 12:19 am

Easy E wrote:i think some of you (mangold) would be better served to just post audio recordings
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Unread post by Easy E » Wed Jan 24, 2007 5:21 am

just turn that fan on and stand up already
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Unread post by checkii » Wed Jan 24, 2007 10:27 am

soright wrote:
Speenis wrote:Here's a critique of your Two Step video...

It was way too rushed and played a little too hard. It makes a beautiful song sound like a mess. I'm really not sure what you're playing around 0:50 but it didn't sound like it fit. The rhythm on the verse was completely off, sounded way too fast and choppy. I'd also try to play those chords the way they are on this site. It didn't look like you used your pinky at all during the verse, which makes playing the song a lot easier IMO. When you went back to the intro you got a little crazy there :lol: I'd try to take that down about 5 notches. It makes it sound like you're butchering it. The chords you were playing around the 1:35 mark sounded a bit off. Actually the whole part between 1:45 and 2:02 sounded really off, I'm not exactly sure what you were playing there but it sounded very rough.

Overall, the rhythm was way off for most of it. You were also hitting a lot of strings/notes that you shouldn't have. I'd say work on the verse the most, because the rhythm wasn't even close to the way it should be.
Around 0:50 that is a two step. Alternating the open A and open E string while holding/strumming Dm. That's what a Two Step is, that's why I threw it in there, thought it was kind of cool. The other parts are just little variations i threw in that probably sound off if you're used to a normal version.


I'm upset with all the comments on my rhythm! Really I'm not ignorant enough to think my rhythm is fine and you guys just have something wrong with you, so I'm out to prove you guys wrong (by the way I appreciate all the constructive criticism).

I'm gonna post new videos within the week and pay more attention to strumming and such.

thanks again for the time and comments...ill get to work.
when you do, i suggest recording them as they are originally played, that way the criticism will be more effective and you can then learn from it more so.

and for the record i find the two step rhythym to be a huge bitch.

cheers.

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Unread post by Speenis » Wed Jan 24, 2007 2:06 pm

Yeah, before you put your own twist on a song, I recommend learning it the way the original artist plays it...then do your own thing from there.
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Unread post by AustinG » Sat Feb 10, 2007 10:47 am

mangold wrote:
Easy E wrote:i think some of you (mangold) would be better served to just post audio recordings
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Now that's funny... :D

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