AustinG-Original-"feel"---Comment on Quality please?

[AustinG]

Here's an original I posted a while back.. I re-recorded today it on my new mixer and threw in some cheesy drums.. Let me know what you guys think.

If there's a drummer out there who would like to lay some beats down that would be sweet.

Guitar/Vocal-One Track
Cheesy Drums-Electric kit (no quantize) one track


http://www.sendspace.com/file/m5vfdz

Aust

[mbent4679]

Catchy. That kind of chorus needs a bridge. It doesn't matter what the bridge sounds like the the contrast between that and the chorus would be amazing.

Oh and can you post the lyrics?

[AustinG]

Thanks.. Kinda like it without the bridge, but I do have version with a bridge i'll post.. I've been meaning to get a recording on here with my new mixer, I know this is quick and dirty, but if anybody heard this trhough my old setup a comment would be appreciated... peace

I aint got no feeling
Up upon my face
Just need your sweet touch
Your amazing grace

I feel so hollow
I can't take shape
Just a need you next to me next to me
You better stay away

Cause I wanna show you something you can't see now
And I wanna tell you something you can't hear now
And I wanna touch you with something you can't feel.

Can you feel my love...
Can you feel my love...

I wanna show you
But you just can't see
I wanna tell you
But you just wont listen

I feel so hollow
I can't take shape
Just need you next to me next to me
You better stay away

Cause I wanna show something you can't see now
And I wanna tell you something you can't hear now
And I wanna touch you with something you can't feel

Can you feel my love ladadada
Can you feel my love ladadada
Can you feel my loveeeeeee


I go up I go down I go al around for your love
I go up I go down I go all around for your love
I go up I go down I go allll around for your love
I go up I go down I go allllll around for your love

For my love
for your love
For my love
cause your love
and my love
is your love
is my love

[lyrics101]

"Just a need you next to me next to me
You better stay away"

I don't understand this; and the rhyme pattern doesn't imply that I shouldn't (I'm allocating for all those ambiguous songwriters in the world; but you don't seem to be one of them).

On a whole, the lyrics aren't mind-blowing Maynard James Keenan quality; but they're perfect for the funky Jack Johnson-esque (and this screams Jack Johnson, which is good; I love JJ).

The chorus is catchy as hell, and I dig it without the bridge; but I feel like your pulling your voice back, not really pushing it out with your abs. I really want that to explode in a way; I can just imagine dancing around on stage with nothing but a mic in my hand blasting that, but its not what I'm hearing from your voice (and I like your voice).

I'm also hearing Maroon 5 in this. All positive comparisons, I assure you.

[mangold]

i hate sendspace. "free service at full capacity"

[AustinG]

"Just a need you next to me next to me
You better stay away"


I don't understand this; and the rhyme pattern doesn't imply that I shouldn't (I'm allocating for all those ambiguous songwriters in the world; but you don't seem to be one of them).
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I hate depicting lyrics, because they always mean different things to different people... But I'll tell you what they meant to me when I wrote them

I'm describing how I would be happy to have even as little as her next to me... but on second thought... I know she's trouble... she better stay away.. I say "she" better stay away because I know I can't control myself...

Thanks brother, I appreciate the feedback.. I listened to a lot of jj when I started playing guitar again a few years ago.... I don't think a bridge fits in this song.. I want it to jump straight back from the jitterry...worrying...self contemplation verses..back to the explosive chorus...which isn't so explosive because I need to record this for real and let loose a little more...

I'm working on my vocals.. they're getting there, but just not where then need to be yet.. I've never had any formal training..... So I finally gave in and signed up for Vocal lessons.. I start next Tuesday.. I'm psyched...

Thanks for the positive comparisons

[AustinG]

Btw.. If you can hear the crow at the beginning of the song.... It's for real.. the window was open.... fitting I thought.....

[Appfro]

i'm about to listen and kind of psyched. i'm getting an electric kit soon and i want to know what level of sound i'm going to be looking at w/ my recordings. brb

not bad. kit doesn't sound bad at all. now if you released this on a pro album, i'd be disappointed, but it being an amature demo type, not bad at all sounding.

i was just thinkign last night about how i wanted to write a song that started vocals first and then added instruments. you have a very rhcp sound in some of this stuff. but it's good, i really like it. kudos.

[AustinG]

Thanks for the listen... Yeah I love RHCP, Stadium Arcadium is such a nice piece of work...But I really like a lot of the old RHCP, "I could Have Lied" is probably in my top 5...

Here's the kit I bought, for the money, and limited space in my room, it was the best kit I could find. PM me when you do buy the kit, I can help you out with VST plugins... I use EZ drummer...I't's like 4 different kits now...... so sick...

http://www.musiciansfriend.com/product/ ... sku=449934

The drums were a last minute thing.. well the whole recording was last minute, all under an hour..I should have spent some time mixing the drums..I started playing them about a month ago, so don't expect anything to crazy out of me for a bit

What did you think about the quality of the vocal recording? levels? I feel like i'm holding back when I record with this new mixer.. not as much as the last one.. But I still feel like I'm afraid to hit the ceiling.. I guess I just have to use it more I bought a compresser, I'm going to see how that sounds this week..

Thanks again for the feedback, I really apprecaite it..

[AustinG]

Can I get a comment on recording quality?

Thanks, appreciate it