Another original...

[Banjobach]

The name of the song is "Neighbor." Tell me, tell me what you think, is it good or does it stink?
http://www.purevolume.com/zachweidenbach

[Banjobach]

christ nothing?

[Appfro]

i must have missed this. sorry. listening now

i really like it. good voice, good guitar. the progression is really pretty. i love the harmonics in the intro. what is going on w/ the bass note in the second verse? did you add a cello or something or did you use an effect to extend the root sound? either way, it's badass.

the only thing i didn't like about it was the delay on your voice. the songs is soft and quiet, and very pretty, and the delay kind of snapped me out of the trance of the song. otherwise, very very good song. two

[Banjobach]

I wanted to blurr the part "when their eyes close" at the end but i couldnt find the right effect. So i settled on a little delay on the vocals, they may be a bit too off for the feel of the song. I did the tim reynolds technique of volume swells and delay to carry the bass notes out longer on the second verse. Thanks for the critique and here are the lyrics:
Trees line the road
By one, by one
Empty lawns unfold
No one, no one
Neighbor dies of old
"Her time" they say
No one hears her soul
today, today

It seems strange to me
Here on she wont be
It seems hard to know
Where do people go
When their eyes close?

Paper on the step
And silent screams
Neighbor, I've not slept
No dreams, no dreams
Ceiling fan has crept
Over my bed
All the birds have wept
Youre dead, Youre dead

And it seems strange to me
Soon they wont be
It seems hard to know
Where do people go
When their eyes close...

[captainburrito]

Wow, I really enjoyed this...everytime I come back here, i find more ridiculously talented people. Great job man. Good lyrics, awesome guitar, and I really thought the effect that you used really added to the song. Keep 'em coming!

[MountainDewser]

this is awesome. good voice

[mangold]

sorry i missed this one first time around

this song has alot of class, i love how you mastered the recording, a good use of effects.

the song itself is a little boring for my taste, but its still really incredible. i love the lyrics and the vocals are pretty good too

its a very good original. keep it up man, def some of the best stuff we've heard from you.

[AustinG]

I dug it, good job...

pm me if you wanna "discuss" plugins

Keep doing your thang

[lyrics101]

Listen to John Vanderslice; songs like Trance Manual and Exodus Damage; I think you'll like him.

I agree about the delay; if you like the effect there, just a little bit of reverb layered on a seperate track (matrix it; might sound cool). I like the bass at the end he was talking about.

I feel like it's something you could do a lot with, although at the moment, there's nothing there to hold me to the end of the song.

[TimmyJ4140]

I like this one, a lot. Very trancey, very meditative. Quality is good, and I love that I can hear the quality and strength in your voice without you belting anything out. I actually liked the delay part, my only suggestion would be to maybe make it slower, draw it out more. As it is now, it does kinda come outta nowhere, ya know? But other than that, I like it. I see it as a song to fit into the 1st encore slot at a show.