Two new songs, MP3s so don't worry, if you'd like.

[lyrics101]

First: http://www.yousendit.com/download/YBZJbzHBBIc%3D

Called "A Wedding Party (or, The Grooms Meet)".




The second: http://www.yousendit.com/download/YBZJbzHBBIc%3D

"The Sandbox", for my friend Josh, killed in Iraq.

This one's pretty damn rough -- I recorded it last night in a matter of minutes, but I'd like some opinions on the sound and direction of it, as well as the lyrics.

Lyrics:

as your soul
sailed with waves
in an aerocar convertible
a swiss knife takes a life
as you drink
your heart to sleep
in a tall bourbon bottle
a dead man's made alive

an ice age will choke us out

as you cover
in a blanket bunker
a war-head drive by
an armageddon jukebox

so quiet down
quiet down

it scrolls by
a nickelodeon
a choreographer's freak show
a hangman and a knie
better hide
get the kids inside
a wet rag mask
dropping down like flies

an ice age will choke us out

dad, we forgot the dog outside

[lyrics101]

Woops, messed up link:

http://www.yousendit.com/download/YBbkvFIh4oA%3D

That's "The Sandbox".

[Yakko]

and I liked the first song too!

[mangold]

1st song:
a very different style than i expected on this site. its not really my style of music but it was ok. keep it up with your style man, there is always an audience.

2nd song:
your voice is weaker in this one, and why do you always throw in the ambient noises in your songs? it really pulls the focus away from your lyrics.
i think your lyrics are trippy and it sounds like youre trying way way way too hard to sound artistic.
just my opinion


PS IS THAT YOUR ALBUM ARTWORK THAT MY ITUNES IMMEDIATELY DOWNLOADED???

[lyrics101]

your voice is weaker in this one, and why do you always throw in the ambient noises in your songs? it really pulls the focus away from your lyrics.
i think your lyrics are trippy and it sounds like youre trying way way way too hard to sound artistic.
just my opinion


PS IS THAT YOUR ALBUM ARTWORK THAT MY ITUNES IMMEDIATELY DOWNLOADED???

One the first song, I recorded the vocals on seperate tracks from the guitar. "Sandbox" was all done at once, press record and go. The ambient noises are all done on the Alvarez, and what can I say? but I like them. I don't really intend for my lyrics to be the forefront of 75% of my songs, especially the calmer ones like this.

I do need to turn them down, though. Maybe put some ducking on them, anyway.

Thanks for the tidbits. I play on rerecording the whole thing, but I wanted to get some thoughts on the basic song as it is. As far as artsy lyrics -- I read too much E. E. Cummings, maybe? It's intended to be about both a war and a dream about the war. There's a story behind that, but y'know.

Artwork? Maybe. I had a picture up I was thinking of using. Didn't occur to me that that'd be sent with it, but I should have thought of it.

[Appfro]

A wedding party

I like the beginning, very professional. I also really like the dissonance. Great beat, nice time sig.

The song really isn’t my cup of tea, but I definitely respect your abilities. It’s got a great beat, the chorus is amazing, and the song definitely keeps my attention. The only suggestion I would have is to work on your vocals a little bit. They’re good, but I think they’re a bit sloppy and if you concentrated on them a bit more, it would add a ton to the song.

The Sandbox

Kind of the same deal w/ the first song, only I don’t feel like this one has as catchy of a chorus. Your music reminds me a lot of Broken Social Scene. The vocals are again a bit sloppy on this one.

That’s all I really have. Good stuff, definitely the most unique of this group I think, but you do it well.