New Original Gents, give er a listen please.

[mangold]

Mt friend sold his usb recording hub so this is just me with my mic plugged in the back of my cpu, back to old school.

I'm looking for some critique specifically on the songwriting and singing.

Bittersweet Baby:
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peace!

[mattinbeloit]

Mt friend sold his usb recording hub so this is just me with my mic plugged in the back of my cpu, back to old school.

I'm looking for some critique specifically on the songwriting and singing.

Bittersweet Baby:
http://www.purevolume.com/andymangold


peace!

It was good overal, guitar was solid throughout. Voice can be better I think, keep practicing. One thing I was thinking was when you get to the chorus were you are like "you're my bittersweet baby", you should try and get some harmony in there. It dosn't have to be words, maybe just saying something like "whooooooah" in the backgroud to fit with that. For some reason, even the first time I listened to it, I thought of that being in there.

[mangold]

Mt friend sold his usb recording hub so this is just me with my mic plugged in the back of my cpu, back to old school.

I'm looking for some critique specifically on the songwriting and singing.

Bittersweet Baby:
http://www.purevolume.com/andymangold


peace!

It was good overal, guitar was solid throughout. Voice can be better I think, keep practicing. One thing I was thinking was when you get to the chorus were you are like "you're my bittersweet baby", you should try and get some harmony in there. It dosn't have to be words, maybe just saying something like "whooooooah" in the backgroud to fit with that. For some reason, even the first time I listened to it, I thought of that being in there.

Thanks for the crit!

(22 views later... *glares at rest of forum*)

I feel like the way this song is written it is much better suited to a full band setting, like i think the chorus could be a pretty strong part of the song with backing, i find it very weird that i wrote a song like that though, as i rarely play with a full band...

I am not really capable of harmonizing anything... my voice sucks im lucky i got the lead track half decent... (i love the idea though)

Thanks again

[mattinbeloit]

Mt friend sold his usb recording hub so this is just me with my mic plugged in the back of my cpu, back to old school.

I'm looking for some critique specifically on the songwriting and singing.

Bittersweet Baby:
http://www.purevolume.com/andymangold


peace!

It was good overal, guitar was solid throughout. Voice can be better I think, keep practicing. One thing I was thinking was when you get to the chorus were you are like "you're my bittersweet baby", you should try and get some harmony in there. It dosn't have to be words, maybe just saying something like "whooooooah" in the backgroud to fit with that. For some reason, even the first time I listened to it, I thought of that being in there.

Thanks for the crit!

(22 views later... *glares at rest of forum*)

I feel like the way this song is written it is much better suited to a full band setting, like i think the chorus could be a pretty strong part of the song with backing, i find it very weird that i wrote a song like that though, as i rarely play with a full band...

I am not really capable of harmonizing anything... my voice sucks im lucky i got the lead track half decent... (i love the idea though)

Thanks again

Play around with the idea anyway, at least it will give you some practice. If anything, it will sound like crap and you can listen to it and laugh and noone will ever know. My voice still sucks but it has gotten a lot better from me just experimenting with ideas like that. Practice really is that best thing to make your voice better. You don't have a bad voice I think, you just need to practice more.

[mangold]

Mt friend sold his usb recording hub so this is just me with my mic plugged in the back of my cpu, back to old school.

I'm looking for some critique specifically on the songwriting and singing.

Bittersweet Baby:
http://www.purevolume.com/andymangold


peace!

It was good overal, guitar was solid throughout. Voice can be better I think, keep practicing. One thing I was thinking was when you get to the chorus were you are like "you're my bittersweet baby", you should try and get some harmony in there. It dosn't have to be words, maybe just saying something like "whooooooah" in the backgroud to fit with that. For some reason, even the first time I listened to it, I thought of that being in there.

Thanks for the crit!

(22 views later... *glares at rest of forum*)

I feel like the way this song is written it is much better suited to a full band setting, like i think the chorus could be a pretty strong part of the song with backing, i find it very weird that i wrote a song like that though, as i rarely play with a full band...

I am not really capable of harmonizing anything... my voice sucks im lucky i got the lead track half decent... (i love the idea though)

Thanks again

Play around with the idea anyway, at least it will give you some practice. If anything, it will sound like crap and you can listen to it and laugh and noone will ever know. My voice still sucks but it has gotten a lot better from me just experimenting with ideas like that. Practice really is that best thing to make your voice better. You don't have a bad voice I think, you just need to practice more.

My family is sleeping but i'm going to give that a shot tommorrow, although i must admit im hearing it much more as an echo in the breakdown "let me in" part.

Thanks for the idea, im pretty one dimensional with recording, one dude one guitar. Its the opposite extreme of what i used to be.

[markTR]

That riff really reminds me of that one Hootie and the Blowfish song, Only Wanna Be With You. Not a bad thing, I dig the riff.

I think your voice is good, gets pitchy in some spots, but overall it works.

One suggestion, after the last "bittersweet baby" from the chorus, you throw in a "todaaay." On first listen, it just sounded kinda awkward, and not really necessary. I think if you just ended it on "and I need you.." it'd be cool. I don't know, just an idea.

Good recording man, you got some talent. Thanks for the music

[mangold]

That riff really reminds me of that one Hootie and the Blowfish song, Only Wanna Be With You. Not a bad thing, I dig the riff.

I think your voice is good, gets pitchy in some spots, but overall it works.

One suggestion, after the last "bittersweet baby" from the chorus, you throw in a "todaaay." On first listen, it just sounded kinda awkward, and not really necessary. I think if you just ended it on "and I need you.." it'd be cool. I don't know, just an idea.

Good recording man, you got some talent. Thanks for the music

shiiiiiiiiit thats a first thanks.

Yeh i didnt like that today after listening to it either, part of it was i wasnt really sure how i was going to end it and i dont like the picking of the chords either.

I'm going to re-record this one for reals when i pick up a usb hub, my goddamn buddy sold his on eBay.

Thanks Alot.

[sfmartins]

The song is pretty cool man!

Indeed, it might get better with a full band and a strong chorus.

Just one suggestion:
you could play the 1st verse by fingering the chords and then step into the chorus (drums come in). After that, you go back to the 2nd verse with strumming chords. It might give the song more progression.

Well, just an opinion.

Great that you guys have the inspiration to create music. I simply don't have it.

[checkii]

Wow, i think it is great. I love the guitar in this and have to disagree that full band would npot make it any better. maybe percussion and a little bass, but really a great tune.
I didnt listen to the lyrics too much. vocals sound like they need a bit of work but you've been at this less than 3 years? wow.

levels of recording i didn't like.

overall good job man!

[TimmyJ4140]

I like the song in and of itself. Yeah, voice needs work, but that's something that just comes with time and practice. Like some of the other guys said, something else during the chorus would fill it out a bit, maybe harmonies, or maybe even like, the last time you do the chorus, you sing it maybe a 3rd above where you were before, just bring it up a little bit, to change it up. Anyways, good stuff, keep it up.

[mangold]

Thanks for all the crits and kind words guys, im going to re-record when i get another usb mixer... cant use my condenser without phantom power... fraggin raggin...

[Appfro]

i like it dude, and your voice is a lot better than i remember it being. you're bringing it from your deep down a lot better, my only advice would be to try your hardest to keep it out of your nose. only a few times i heard it, 99% of the song, your voice was great. good job.

nice simple progression, really catchy. i like it.

edit: the only part i don't like is the part from the first chorus into the first verse. sounds too much like "i only wanna be with you" by hootie. the rest of it i dig though.