New Song - "Sleep"

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New Song - "Sleep"

Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Thu Oct 30, 2003 5:08 pm

Dont ask me why I named it "Sleep". I just cant create titles, I'm sorry. :p

anyway here it is, its pretty rough.

http://www.angelfire.com/musicals/mr_pat3/sleep.mp3

any comments welcome. :)
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Unread post by fatjack » Thu Oct 30, 2003 5:14 pm

definitely stole that title from Phish :P

the quality was pretty good, but i cant really say i liked the song. the progression was just too generic. the parts you fingerpicked were nice though, they actually had a dream like quality to them.

i didn't care for the lead either, it just seemed like you were playing notes for the sake of playing notes. it was a bit too rigid to be melodic
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Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Thu Oct 30, 2003 5:28 pm

ok ill name it dream. :p yeah, the lead, like you said, was put in really because it sounded bland w/o it. oh well.
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Unread post by MWR » Thu Oct 30, 2003 5:48 pm

I think it just needs a bridge or pre-chorus or something to get away from that main riff. I like the riff but the song should move around more imo.
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