My frist Original Post - Went To The Water

blaze · Unread post by **blaze** » Thu Oct 16, 2003 2:18 pm

Hi This is my frist original to show up in hear. Iv been playing for about 9 months ( 6 months seriously) and in Aug I started trying to write some simple songs and been pluggin along at it ever since. This is the frist song I chose to record and post hear. I wrote it a few weeks ago. The programe I used was ddclip.

The timing with the guitar and vocals is off abit at a few parts, the reason for this is the hole song is on one track aside from the solo. ( I dont like seperate tracks for vocals). Allthough the vocals and guitar probley would have sounded better if I did use 2 tracks. PLEASE disregard the finger picking at the end, I was trying to go buck wild instead of my keeping in my boundries , you can tell my lack of skills held me back hear and it just ends up stinkin. I didn't wanna re-record because I was happy with the rest and I usally fu<k up somewhere.

-POSITIVE AND NEGATIVE FEEDBACK WOULD BE MUCH APPRECIATED. THANK YOU.

( You can hear my little brother yell "Oh My God" at something on tv during the solo. I think it sounds kinda cool so I stuck with that one)

http://members.shaw.ca/DanMWhalley/

Its on the left hand side under original songs, Peep the My Ben Harper site too If ya got a chance.

DMBFan63 · Unread post by **DMBFan63** » Thu Oct 16, 2003 4:02 pm

sounds pretty good.. listening as I type..:

Vocals are solid.. sounds like the guitaring is solid, yet simple.. simple isn't always bad thought. Nice lyrics.. i suck at writing lyrics so anything is better then me.. so :-p Just getting to the solo now.. sounds good.. i personally can't solo, mainly because i never really tried.. :-p sounds basic, yet it is still cool.
Overall, good original.. much better then i could do.. i'm not much of a writer yet..

Been playing for so long but all my songs end up sounding exactly like a dave song, or they just sound like crap.. so it sounds good..

Appfro · Unread post by **Appfro** » Thu Oct 16, 2003 11:41 pm

nice relaxing progression. you kinda changed the rhthym from the intro to the verse...not sure if you did it on purpose, but IMO i think it would sound a lot smoother if you keep they intro beat.

your voice needs a little work, but nothing that you can't fix w/ some practice.

ok the only thing i didn't like about the song (and this is the pot calling the kettle black) but i didn't really like the lyrics very much. like i said, i suck at writing, but i still know what i like. not that they were bad just that i didn't understand it at all.

good job though man. i love originals, keep posting.

-i liked the solo. and the OH My God in the background. tell your brother that was a good addition.

blaze · Unread post by **blaze** » Fri Oct 17, 2003 12:45 pm

Thanks for both replys

blaze · Unread post by **blaze** » Fri Oct 17, 2003 12:49 pm

Appsoldier wrote:nice relaxing progression. you kinda changed the rhthym from the intro to the verse...not sure if you did it on purpose, but IMO i think it would sound a lot smoother if you keep they intro beat.

your voice needs a little work, but nothing that you can't fix w/ some practice.

ok the only thing i didn't like about the song (and this is the pot calling the kettle black) but i didn't really like the lyrics very much. like i said, i suck at writing, but i still know what i like. not that they were bad just that i didn't understand it at all.

good job though man. i love originals, keep posting.

-i liked the solo. and the OH My God in the background. tell your brother that was a good addition.

ya the intro is the same as the chorus, and the verses is the almost the same but without the bottom string being struck at certain parts, ill look into keeping the rhthym the same the hole way.

Thanks man goood advice.

ElGuitarrista · Unread post by **ElGuitarrista** » Sat Oct 18, 2003 12:47 am

diggin' it... good job. Your voice has great potential... I like the sound.. .you can polish it a bit.

mastermindmatthews3436 · Unread post by **mastermindmatthews3436** » Mon Oct 20, 2003 9:05 pm

yeh great man, you kinda throw out the ben harper vibe, i would say the only criticism would be to take the delay off of the solo, it will make it sound clearer and maybe you can add more to it, other than that its awesome...i liek the oh my god as well

blaze · Unread post by **blaze** » Tue Oct 21, 2003 3:37 am

mastermindmatthews3436 wrote:yeh great man, you kinda throw out the ben harper vibe, i would say the only criticism would be to take the delay off of the solo, it will make it sound clearer and maybe you can add more to it, other than that its awesome...i liek the oh my god as well

Thanks for your imput. Im kinda unconfident with my soloing. Thats why I went with delay ( hides the crappyness)

. But ill definately cheak it out with out delay. Maybe I will fluke out a rip a decent solo.

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