So I just wrote my first song...

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So I just wrote my first song...

Unread post by whatshername » Fri Feb 17, 2006 1:17 am

And I think it sucks. :lol: Here are the lyrics, I have yet to record it..but let me know what you think of them:

Sometimes I’m flying high and then there’s
One thing that tears me down
I try so hard to play both sides of the road
But there’s never a right way to go

I am stuck and I have no choice
But I continue on my way
It’s a cycle that tires me out
And I’ve got nothing left to say

‘Cause I’m in the middle and it’s eating me up
No one sees it like me
I keep a smile on my face, pretend everything’s okay
I’m in the middle and it’s out of my hands

Always divided and never one
It hasn’t been that way for months
I have to tip-toe around each day
Hope that nothing goes wrong

I can’t choose to say uninvolved
This situation is my life
There’s no leaving it, it’s here to stay
And like I said, I’ve got nothing more to say

‘Cause I’m in the middle and it’s eating me up
No one sees it like me
I keep a smile on my face, pretend everything’s okay
I’m in the middle and it’s out of my hands

Pointing fingers never gets old
Around here it’s a regular thing
“No, she’s wrong and here’s why”
In an hour I’ll hear the other side

I’m sick of all of this, just give it up
There’s only so much one middle man can take
This is my line, I’m drawing it here
I need to live my own life, not theirs

Moving on
Doing my own thing
Might not be easy
But I’m moving on

‘Cause I’m in the middle and it’s eating me up
No one sees it like me
I keep a smile on my face, pretend everything’s okay
I’m in the middle, but now it’s in my hands
-whit

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Unread post by SillyPutty » Fri Feb 17, 2006 7:51 am

I'd be interested in hearing a final recording of that. It looks interesting...well done. :)
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Unread post by whatshername » Fri Feb 17, 2006 9:40 am

SillyPutty wrote:I'd be interested in hearing a final recording of that. It looks interesting...well done. :)
yes, i think i'll get to it tomorrow night..i can thank my coaches for early sunday morning practice, saturday night is my new "recording night". cool, i know :lol:
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Unread post by mattinbeloit » Fri Feb 17, 2006 10:06 am

not bad, want to hear it though. One thing that struck me odd was when you said you where trying to PLAY both sides of the road, maybe change that to ride so your saying you are trying to ride both sides or something. Still says the same thing, makes a little more sense.
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Unread post by Kahn » Fri Feb 17, 2006 10:41 am

Did you right a song about me? Aw thats so cute
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Unread post by mdel21 » Fri Feb 17, 2006 4:58 pm

Is this about becoming a lesbian?

You should call it "Out of My Hands"
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Unread post by whatshername » Fri Feb 17, 2006 7:31 pm

mdel21 wrote:Is this about becoming a lesbian?

You should call it "Out of My Hands"
no, it's not

i'm calling it "in the middle"
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Unread post by mangold » Fri Feb 17, 2006 8:15 pm

i love that it doesnt rhyme...

my goddamn muther friggon head wont write a lyric that doesnt rhyme... AND I HATE RHYMING LYRICS I FEEL LIKE DOCTOR FUCKING SUESS... sry for the language i had to vent






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Unread post by Beauford33 » Fri Feb 17, 2006 9:08 pm

praisedave wrote:i love that it doesnt rhyme...

my goddamn muther friggon head wont write a lyric that doesnt rhyme... AND I HATE RHYMING LYRICS I FEEL LIKE DOCTOR FUCKING SUESS... sry for the language i had to vent






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Unread post by mangold » Fri Feb 17, 2006 9:10 pm

Beauford33 wrote:
praisedave wrote:i love that it doesnt rhyme...

my goddamn muther friggon head wont write a lyric that doesnt rhyme... AND I HATE RHYMING LYRICS I FEEL LIKE DOCTOR FUCKING SUESS... sry for the language i had to vent






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Unread post by a1075dd63aa12 » Sat Feb 18, 2006 2:47 am

praisedave wrote:
Beauford33 wrote:
praisedave wrote:i love that it doesnt rhyme...

my goddamn muther friggon head wont write a lyric that doesnt rhyme... AND I HATE RHYMING LYRICS I FEEL LIKE DOCTOR FUCKING SUESS... sry for the language i had to vent






(is it werid that im self conscious of my language around a girl?)
No, but you're still a huge vagina anyway.
you are what you eat my man [/4th grade humor].
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Unread post by mdel21 » Sat Feb 18, 2006 11:11 am

whatshername wrote:
mdel21 wrote:Is this about becoming a lesbian?

You should call it "Out of My Hands"
no, it's not

i'm calling it "in the middle"
I know, just giving the COLLEGE SOFTBALL PLAYER a hard time.
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Unread post by whatshername » Sat Feb 18, 2006 2:24 pm

mdel21 wrote:
whatshername wrote:
mdel21 wrote:Is this about becoming a lesbian?

You should call it "Out of My Hands"
no, it's not

i'm calling it "in the middle"
I know, just giving the COLLEGE SOFTBALL PLAYER a hard time.
i've heard it all, i'm numb to it now.

hopefully recording this tonight..if my roommate and her boyfriend aren't around
-whit

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Unread post by Andre_GT7 » Sat Feb 18, 2006 2:28 pm

whatshername wrote:
mdel21 wrote:Is this about becoming a lesbian?

You should call it "Out of My Hands"
no, it's not

i'm calling it "in the middle"
so it's about being Bi?

hahhaa...j/k

nice Lyrics....
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Unread post by Kahn » Sat Feb 18, 2006 2:58 pm

whatshername wrote:hopefully recording this tonight..if my roommate and her boyfriend aren't around
either way you should record something tonight
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