a quick song I made

[dmb_rulz]

Go easy on me kind of new to making my own stuff and recording. Realy still trying to find my singing voice.

http://s50.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=0YET ... 28XNFS64DT

[a1075dd63aa12]

nice work man, i like the song quite a bit.

as far as a critique of the song which is probably more what youre after:

1) the voice is good, but it seems like you are holding back a little bit, a little unsteady. Not just the whispery aspect of it, i think that fits, it just seems a bit unsure and unsteady (i hope that makes sense).

2) the chorus is good, if you could have some kind of bridge to it, instead of going to it so abruptly it could really liven up the song i think, it will break up the song a little bit. unless thats what you are going for which is fine too.

[dmb_rulz]

Thanks so much i see what you mean should of made something for a more smooth trans from verse to chours.