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Unread post by Dutch » Wed Jan 25, 2006 3:53 pm

here is an original song, please critique. i guess youre supposed to replace the x after the 55 and the it with a .

http://s55.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=0XLA ... MF9AA3SI92
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Unread post by Dutch » Thu Jan 26, 2006 12:27 am

nothing? damn it, this is my first attempt at songwriting
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Unread post by RunsWithBuffalo » Thu Jan 26, 2006 1:54 am

Umm i tried replacing the x with a . and it didnt work. Is that the link it gave you or did you change it? I have seen hxxp:// but never this, i think thats why your responses are 0. try putting up a good link and you'll get some responses. At least i will.

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Unread post by RunsWithBuffalo » Thu Jan 26, 2006 1:55 am

ahhh i figured it out. there are two x's replace them both
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Unread post by RunsWithBuffalo » Thu Jan 26, 2006 2:02 am

Cool little riff, I like how the two guitar parts overlap. However, the main riff gets a little repetitive, perhaps some variation is needed. Also, when the guitar solo starts, which is very good, you get some "white noise." Might try to reduce that with some EQ or noise reduction. Your voice is pretty strong, very good. I especially like the briny sea part, the vocals and the guitar go very well together.

What is your recording setup?

overall very good job, keep posting
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Unread post by Dutch » Thu Jan 26, 2006 11:03 am

i changed it to a direct link. i am just recording through the little mic on my ibook into garageband with my acoustic. the white noise before the solo is there because i recorded with an acoustic and then must put on the distortion on through garage band, so it distorted the background noise that you usually wouldn't hear on a clean track. thanks for the feedback.
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Unread post by brian_ok » Thu Jan 26, 2006 3:40 pm

I couldn't DL it because I don't have iTunes (m4a), but I noticed that you're in Oxford, do you go to Miami? I live in Springboro, a little south of Dayton.
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Unread post by Dutch » Thu Jan 26, 2006 4:43 pm

ya i am at miami. good school. you ever come here to party or anything?
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