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clip of a new song

Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Tue Oct 04, 2005 8:55 pm

i wrote this today after school (on the piano this time!). it's pretty much the first that ive written that has a lyrical theme to it. it's basically about me selfish, wondering what sets me apart from the less fortunate. they're always told to "try a little harder...be a little stronger..." but honestly, i ahven't done much, yet here i am living in a very fortunate family.

i'm defintely not done, but i WILL be finishing this one. also, i didn't record this track with a metronome, so it's probably out a bit.

thanks in advance.

http://www.patmcinnis.com/sofort.mp3
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Unread post by rockyall107 » Tue Oct 04, 2005 10:13 pm

sounds good so far..cant wait to hear the finished product
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Unread post by i am sam2 » Tue Oct 04, 2005 10:24 pm

holy shit if you dont sound like the beatles (john/paul) then i dont know who does. damn. thats good too. and the lyrics arent corney...good job...but i want to hear the guitar!!
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Unread post by dmbguitar718 » Tue Oct 04, 2005 10:34 pm

thanks. i'll see where it goes, and see if i add some guitar. i'd like to add some clean/soft electric.

i still need to work things out, i was just wondering what you guys thought of it so far.
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Unread post by gumbomadness » Tue Oct 04, 2005 10:53 pm

i like it. its simple-- which does NOT mean bad.
you sound like you have an accent.

i cant wait to hear the uber powerful bridge to this song.
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Unread post by CWMCALL » Wed Oct 05, 2005 8:01 am

that sounds great Pat!
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Unread post by lozthegreat » Wed Oct 05, 2005 1:05 pm

i like it. At first i thought you were playing Bryan Adams - "Heaven" sounds just like the intro. Good job though.
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Unread post by Kukini » Wed Oct 05, 2005 3:17 pm

good start, you should sing in your clips of guitar.
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Unread post by EnFuego » Sun Oct 16, 2005 3:30 pm

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Unread post by mangold » Tue Oct 18, 2005 5:49 pm

i got an error and i wanna listen
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