lyric critque request

[thenamenottaken]

whatcha think peoples?

Correspondence and whispered words
fall short of a lover's embrace
as the moon shines down
and gently illuminates

sweat, tears and kisses
cause the globe to spin
answered prayers and begging
bring unending calm

stubborn oceans separate
desperate hearts do bind
promises of togetherness
shift the continents

sweetly we lay on the fault line
singing songs of love
caresses weave tender magic
the moon shines above

[Kukini]

very vague, could be more elaborate. Nice imagery however. Very poetic