New song...please critique!!!

[bots444]

I just wrote this song, i wanted you guys to tell me what you think. i haven't recorded the lyrics for it yet, cause im still working on them. Let me know what you think of it so far....also didn't ge to lay the drums down yet.

[Appfro]

you also forgot the link

[bots444]

sorry about that.......i don't know what i was thinking hahaha...here is the link
http://savefile.com/files/6504694

[bots444]

That was the wrong link....im sorry im retarded haha here is the real one

http://savefile.com/files/4002791

[longleggedfrog]

I'd prefer to hear it with lyrics but I took a listen and liked it. Well put together. sounded like you slipped a few notes once or twice though and it was a little long and monotonous. I just said this to someone else, but I felt like you were building up to something and it wasn't there....I felt like the song should jump out at me at somepoint, but instead it stayed the same. that's all i got. Let us know when you have some lyrics down.