All my life - new original

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All my life - new original

Unread post by borocks » Wed Jul 06, 2005 6:58 am

Hi folks

so this is my latest piece of music. please have a listen and drop me a line if you please

http://www.k-web.ch/41/allmylife.mp3
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Unread post by mrjones » Wed Jul 06, 2005 12:45 pm

thats good. you kinda struggle to hit some of the notes while singing but besides that, its good
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Unread post by borocks » Thu Jul 07, 2005 5:53 am

thanks for responding.

the singing is a bit off in the chorus on some notes, but it's a pretty high pitch...
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Unread post by GreedylilPig » Fri Jul 08, 2005 7:41 pm

Enjoyed this one, Bo. Pretty cool lead throughout the song. Your voice sounds a lot better than I recall (as compared to about a year ago or so I would guess). However, you're in and out of key throughout this song. When you're in, it really sounds great. When you're out, well, you're out. I must also add that at some points the lyrics don't flow very well. They just seem a bit forced. But that's songwriting and that gets better the more you do it and I encourage you to keep doing so. By the way, particularly nice vocal ending. Nice job.
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