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My first original

Unread post by Swede » Tue Apr 26, 2005 4:33 pm

Just for fun!

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Unread post by Appfro » Tue Apr 26, 2005 4:41 pm

why do you write in english?
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Unread post by Swede » Tue Apr 26, 2005 4:46 pm

i hate singing in Swedish..

was that negative? hehe
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Unread post by Appfro » Tue Apr 26, 2005 4:47 pm

no, definetly not. you did a lot better than i would have if i had tried singing in swedish. :) i couldn't hear the song very well cause there are people around and they're being loud, but it sounded pretty good. i'll have to listen better when i'm alone.
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Unread post by Swede » Tue Apr 26, 2005 4:49 pm

Appfro wrote:no, definetly not. you did a lot better than i would have if i had tried singing in swedish. :) i couldn't hear the song very well cause there are people around and they're being loud, but it sounded pretty good. i'll have to listen better when i'm alone.
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Unread post by Swede » Tue Apr 26, 2005 5:33 pm

no one?
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Unread post by jellyfish » Tue Apr 26, 2005 6:27 pm

Swede wrote:no one?
Im gonna listen to it in a bit.
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Unread post by jellyfish » Tue Apr 26, 2005 6:35 pm

You have a pretty good voice there. i like the song, but I would add perhaps a faster chorus or bridge to make it more exciting.
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Unread post by mangold » Tue Apr 26, 2005 7:06 pm

Hmmm... this is cool.
You got some pipes, the beginning of the song gets a little old when it becomes the entire song... it'd be anice intro, but it should be building to a big chorus, then back to mello for the breakdown imo.

nice work, keep writin and keep postin
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Unread post by jellyfish » Tue Apr 26, 2005 7:07 pm

praisedave wrote:Hmmm... this is cool.
You got some pipes, the beginning of the song gets a little old when it becomes the entire song... it'd be anice intro, but it should be building to a big chorus, then back to mello for the breakdown imo.

nice work, keep writin and keep postin
Why didn't you just quote me? :roll: :D
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Unread post by mangold » Tue Apr 26, 2005 7:10 pm

jellyfish wrote:
praisedave wrote:Hmmm... this is cool.
You got some pipes, the beginning of the song gets a little old when it becomes the entire song... it'd be anice intro, but it should be building to a big chorus, then back to mello for the breakdown imo.

nice work, keep writin and keep postin
Why didn't you just quote me? :roll: :D
because i didnt read ur comment, i like to be unbiased when i crit.
not that anyone listens to me!
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Unread post by jellyfish » Tue Apr 26, 2005 7:12 pm

praisedave wrote:
jellyfish wrote:
praisedave wrote:Hmmm... this is cool.
You got some pipes, the beginning of the song gets a little old when it becomes the entire song... it'd be anice intro, but it should be building to a big chorus, then back to mello for the breakdown imo.

nice work, keep writin and keep postin
Why didn't you just quote me? :roll: :D
because i didnt read ur comment, i like to be unbiased when i crit.
not that anyone listens to me!
OK. I usually dont read other comments as well. I think he has some good talent, just needs to "spruce" up the song a bit. Perhaps Batson could take a trip to Sweden aND HELP HIM OUT. sorry for the caps lock.
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Unread post by mangold » Tue Apr 26, 2005 7:15 pm

jellyfish wrote:
praisedave wrote:
jellyfish wrote:
praisedave wrote:Hmmm... this is cool.
You got some pipes, the beginning of the song gets a little old when it becomes the entire song... it'd be anice intro, but it should be building to a big chorus, then back to mello for the breakdown imo.

nice work, keep writin and keep postin
Why didn't you just quote me? :roll: :D
because i didnt read ur comment, i like to be unbiased when i crit.
not that anyone listens to me!
OK. I usually dont read other comments as well. I think he has some good talent, just needs to "spruce" up the song a bit. Perhaps Batson could take a trip to Sweden aND HELP HIM OUT. sorry for the caps lock.
lol, didnt it take just as long to apologize for it as it would have taken to fix it?
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Unread post by jellyfish » Tue Apr 26, 2005 7:17 pm

I thought the same thing. But, Oh well. I apologized at least!!
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Unread post by Swede » Wed Apr 27, 2005 3:45 pm

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