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Good music, you provide the rest

Unread post by Easy E » Sat Apr 16, 2005 4:50 pm

Alright, i've been slinging this bad boy around for a few months now and I can't for the life of me come up with decent lyrics that this riff deserves. If any of you guys consider yourselves lyricists take a look at this and tell me what feeling you are getting. Also the guys that suck like me can check it out too

http://s37.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=3A6R ... 30V1M6JOK4

PS. I hope this one gets stuck in your head too, Hof
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Unread post by jsgksu » Sat Apr 16, 2005 4:59 pm

I cant sing or write lyrics so I fall into the "suck at life" category. I really liked the song if you give a shit though, it was pretty good.
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Unread post by Easy E » Sat Apr 16, 2005 5:00 pm

thanks james, effort appreciated
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Unread post by onid41 » Sat Apr 16, 2005 6:09 pm

i wish i could help ya out eric...i suck at singing and writing as well man...

but sweet riffs on the guitar though..i guess just write whatever's on your mind
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Unread post by juineaux » Sat Apr 16, 2005 6:18 pm

i'm pretty busy for the next week or so, but I can probably add something if you can't find someone in that time-

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Re: Good music, you provide the rest

Unread post by acusticdude » Sat Apr 16, 2005 7:12 pm

I just started listening to this and immediately started thinking jack johnson, which immediately led me to a surf/beach theme. I am not very good at writing "general" lyrics. Most of my stuff is pretty personal but if you are looking for some direction that is how the music made me feel. Sounds really cool by the way! I hope you find the right words and post a final product.

eze3484 wrote:Alright, i've been slinging this bad boy around for a few months now and I can't for the life of me come up with decent lyrics that this riff deserves. If any of you guys consider yourselves lyricists take a look at this and tell me what feeling you are getting. Also the guys that suck like me can check it out too

http://s37.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=3A6R ... 30V1M6JOK4

PS. I hope this one gets stuck in your head too, Hof
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Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Sat Apr 16, 2005 9:36 pm

Here ya go.... I had some time to spare tonight. Think it came out pretty well. Tell me what ya think

http://www.miguelfernandes.com/Amaj.mp3

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lyrics:

the streets are covered with downtown girls in uptown bars
lookin for stars
and lookin for pearls

save you and save me

everytime i see you speak
my heart skips a beat
and i say hey hey lovely baby
wont you come and dance with me?

stupid man, you aint funny man
stupid man, what have you done today to impress me?

you see, it's always the same story
we never take a chance and the blame is on me
everytime i put my hand on my sleeve
i feel a beating heart, beaten and bleeding yo

save you and save me

everytime i hear you speak my heart believes it

stupid man, you aint funny man
stupid man (she said)

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Unread post by You_Enjoy_Myself » Sat Apr 16, 2005 10:03 pm

that sounded good Miguel, I loved the opening line.
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Unread post by Easy E » Sun Apr 17, 2005 9:20 am

wow thats really cool miguel, I love hearing other people's interpretation of what im playing. I can restructure it if you want to do more, let me know what you think of my Hum Drum song too, its on my website(WWW button)
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Unread post by mangold » Sun Apr 17, 2005 9:50 am

Trippin Hillbilly wrote:Here ya go.... I had some time to spare tonight. Think it came out pretty well. Tell me what ya think

http://www.miguelfernandes.com/Amaj.mp3

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lyrics:

the streets are covered with downtown girls in uptown bars
lookin for stars
and lookin for pearls

save you and save me

everytime i see you speak
my heart skips a beat
and i say hey hey lovely baby
wont you come and dance with me?

stupid man, you aint funny man
stupid man, what have you done today to impress me?

you see, it's always the same story
we never take a chance and the blame is on me
everytime i put my hand on my sleeve
i feel a beating heart, beaten and bleeding yo

save you and save me

everytime i hear you speak my heart believes it

stupid man, you aint funny man
stupid man (she said)
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that was awesome. you rule
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Unread post by Easy E » Sun Apr 17, 2005 10:25 am

praisedave wrote:
Trippin Hillbilly wrote:Here ya go.... I had some time to spare tonight. Think it came out pretty well. Tell me what ya think

http://www.miguelfernandes.com/Amaj.mp3

Code: Select all

lyrics:

the streets are covered with downtown girls in uptown bars
lookin for stars
and lookin for pearls

save you and save me

everytime i see you speak
my heart skips a beat
and i say hey hey lovely baby
wont you come and dance with me?

stupid man, you aint funny man
stupid man, what have you done today to impress me?

you see, it's always the same story
we never take a chance and the blame is on me
everytime i put my hand on my sleeve
i feel a beating heart, beaten and bleeding yo

save you and save me

everytime i hear you speak my heart believes it

stupid man, you aint funny man
stupid man (she said)
MIGUEL-ED

that was awesome. you rule
the music was pretty good too...
Cor wrote:I mentioned awhile ago trying to bang this huge near 7 foot woman I know. Hit it last night. I got manhandled, it was sweet.

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Unread post by You_Enjoy_Myself » Sun Apr 17, 2005 10:27 am

yeah, I completely forgot to comment on the music. It was really good Eric, some cool licks in there. I'm actually kinda surprised you couldn't come up with lyrics for this one, because all the other lyrics you've posted here have been pretty damn good.
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Unread post by Flakes » Sun Apr 17, 2005 10:59 am

wow miguel that ruled
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Unread post by Easy E » Sun Apr 17, 2005 11:27 am

You_Enjoy_Myself wrote:yeah, I completely forgot to comment on the music. It was really good Eric, some cool licks in there. I'm actually kinda surprised you couldn't come up with lyrics for this one, because all the other lyrics you've posted here have been pretty damn good.
I can never find a good vocal melody, it always seems bland
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Unread post by myxomatosis » Sun Apr 17, 2005 11:57 am

nice job both of you.. the lyrics reminded me a lot of DMB - "save you and save me" and "won't you come and dance with me"
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