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Fuck lyrics Critique, critique this motherfucking song MFers

Unread post by Easy E » Tue Mar 29, 2005 5:37 am

how does this all look so far?

I was a joke, too afraid to tell
And if I were a scream
I’d be too afraid to yell
As the lovely kind of girl
Walks away

She was a star, too bright to shine
For a rebel who, was too scared to die
So this lovely kind of girl
Walks away

She would talk about us
Like we’re priceless
Never true

Hiding in her motion
Any notion
We were through

She would talk about us
Just to impress
self proclaim

Hiding in her motion
Any notion
Things would never be the same

EDIT: I decided to post me a rough draft if you will, check the link, tell me if it stinks

http://s47.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=2CP3 ... QPSMVY5IIG
Last edited by Easy E on Tue Mar 29, 2005 2:51 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Cor wrote:I mentioned awhile ago trying to bang this huge near 7 foot woman I know. Hit it last night. I got manhandled, it was sweet.
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Unread post by sunglassesatnight » Tue Mar 29, 2005 8:34 am

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Unread post by hofdaddy » Tue Mar 29, 2005 11:55 am

Man where's a mic at work when I need one? I just got this rhythm in my head for that song, oh well!
Give a woman an inch and she'll take a foot. Give a woman a foot and she'll moan like a whore

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Unread post by Easy E » Tue Mar 29, 2005 2:55 pm

top for the edit sake
Cor wrote:I mentioned awhile ago trying to bang this huge near 7 foot woman I know. Hit it last night. I got manhandled, it was sweet.
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Unread post by Easy E » Tue Mar 29, 2005 11:11 pm

sweet, not a single comment
Cor wrote:I mentioned awhile ago trying to bang this huge near 7 foot woman I know. Hit it last night. I got manhandled, it was sweet.
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Unread post by seanbryantkbq » Tue Mar 29, 2005 11:27 pm

im liking the song. it sounds folky. your voice sounds kinda like the guy from taking back sunday. its good. a few off key notes, but i still really like it. good work. (hope this helps)
don't kid yourself and don't fool yourself
this love's too good to last and i'm too old to dream

don't grow up too fast don't embrace the past
this life's too good to last and i'm too young to care

don't kid yourself and don't fool yourself
this life could be the last and we're too young to see
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Unread post by Easy E » Thu Mar 31, 2005 1:40 am

seriously one comment?
Cor wrote:I mentioned awhile ago trying to bang this huge near 7 foot woman I know. Hit it last night. I got manhandled, it was sweet.
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Unread post by hofdaddy » Thu Mar 31, 2005 2:39 pm

It's missing something. I can't quite put my finger on it. Maybe brighten up the singing in the chorus. Shit! I can't figure it out right now. I'll give it a couple more of listens
Give a woman an inch and she'll take a foot. Give a woman a foot and she'll moan like a whore

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Unread post by a1075dd63aa12 » Thu Mar 31, 2005 8:11 pm

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Unread post by sk8r » Thu Mar 31, 2005 8:25 pm

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