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Need some help with lyrics.

Unread post by isaac » Thu Aug 07, 2003 12:13 pm

all right, been messing around with these lyrics for a bit...still not satisfied with them, but it's a rough idea. i'll try posting the music for it later. any helps appreciated, guys. :) oh, and uh...please, don't steal. ;) i did the mail it to myself thing! bwaha. it's a little sappy, but all love songs usually are. hehe.



she said it was written in the stars
and i laughed at her
but when i juxtaposed my mind to her heart
i knew she was right

and i hate reminiscing
yet it's something i'm bound to do
when there's nothing else i'm bound to

in a small gesture
like a stint towards heaven
we both fell away towards the ground
love, love, unspoken love

we salted our lips in anticipation
of a night bathed in the sun

let your diamonds fall from your eyes
and your lips smear mine
it's all right, it's all right
just breathe me tonight

breathe me tonight
and i promise i'll let you go with ease
just please, break me tonight

you were like paradise split in two
with a tuck of your hair behind your ear
i ached for you
and then you fell through the window
sending sparks through my veins
keeping me sane in the afterglow
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Unread post by juineaux » Thu Aug 07, 2003 12:34 pm

sounds good, a like the light ryhme sceme, i dont really like lyrics that ryhyme too much, and yours is really nice and subtle. Good Job, cant wait to hear the music. :D

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Unread post by saleen » Thu Aug 07, 2003 12:46 pm

mail it to yourself thing?
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Unread post by isaac » Thu Aug 07, 2003 12:48 pm

hah. for copyright protection. there was a thread on this a while ago...lemme see if i can dig it up.

and thanks for the comment juineaux. :) i appreciate it.
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Unread post by rin » Thu Aug 07, 2003 6:13 pm

i really like your style isaac...very poetic, kind of hymn-like, if that makes sense. there's a word here and there that's a little jarring, but that could be because it was meant to be sung, not recited. i like it!

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Unread post by Speenis » Thu Aug 07, 2003 9:40 pm

looks pretty good to me. Juxtaposed???? Am I the only one who doesn't know what that means???
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Unread post by I'mWithFatjack » Thu Aug 07, 2003 9:57 pm

BigSpeen3436 wrote:looks pretty good to me. Juxtaposed???? Am I the only one who doesn't know what that means???
pretty good lyrics but yeah what the hell is juxtaposed?
Laughter come on downtown window
And we see faces walking back
Tonight everybody gonna remember
Remember in time...

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Unread post by isaac » Thu Aug 07, 2003 11:40 pm

lol...thanks for the comments everyone.

as for juxtaposed- "To place side by side, especially for comparison or contrast."

;) maybe i'm the only one who uses it...bah. hehe. thanks again, everyone. i'll get the song up relatively soon. have to work for 12 hours a day for a little bit, so i might not be around much. *sigh*
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Unread post by Speenis » Fri Aug 08, 2003 12:03 am

good. whoops, didn't mean to...type... that out loud!?!? oh boy
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Unread post by CPTino3001 » Fri Aug 08, 2003 12:05 am

isaac wrote:lol...thanks for the comments everyone.

as for juxtaposed- "To place side by side, especially for comparison or contrast."

;) maybe i'm the only one who uses it...bah. hehe. thanks again, everyone. i'll get the song up relatively soon. have to work for 12 hours a day for a little bit, so i might not be around much. *sigh*
It's used in that "Schism" song Tool did...

"Pure intention juxtaposed will set two lovers souls in motion..." blah blah

...just happened to remember that offhand...
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