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New Original: Crawling

Unread post by borocks » Sun Mar 06, 2005 9:01 am

This riff came up as I messed around with a couple of Dave chords and some own stuff, then I kind of put this together. I doesn't sound at all like a dave song though. The lyrics are just what came to my mind within about an hour or so and are not really sophisticated...

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Unread post by sk8r » Sun Mar 06, 2005 3:19 pm

good chord progression...lyrics are kinda creepy like gravedigger but in a good way...vox sound good at parts during chorus, but during verse they sound almost emotionless which takes away from the lyrics
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Unread post by mangold » Mon Mar 07, 2005 3:15 pm

this is cool. the guitar is good, but the voclas were not your best performance. the lyrics sound really good. i cannot write lyrics for balls, so im impressed by that. the chorus is really good, both singing and guitar. i dont know why so few people crit you.
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Unread post by borocks » Mon Mar 07, 2005 3:28 pm

Thanks for listening Andy :)
regarding the vocals I think so too; the lyrics of the quiet parts could need a bit polishing...

I'm glad the lyrics "pass". Since English is not my first language, I was kind of reluctant to write lyrics in the beginning, but I think I gradually get into it. :)
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Unread post by mangold » Mon Mar 07, 2005 5:04 pm

borocks wrote:Thanks for listening Andy :)
regarding the vocals I think so too; the lyrics of the quiet parts could need a bit polishing...

I'm glad the lyrics "pass". Since English is not my first language, I was kind of reluctant to write lyrics in the beginning, but I think I gradually get into it. :)
wow i didnt realize english wasnt your first language... thats incredible
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