Another original. Comments are appreciated.

[patricksullivan]

Losing A Chance To Win

Why am I so lost
Even though I know for sure were I want to go
Can't you see you are my light
That guides me through the dark and helps me start my fire

What I am for you
Just another misdemeanor when love is but a crime
I believe that's not the case
Is it because I don't shine bright enough to satisfy

For sure I will change
To fulfill your needs

But I will not give way
To what I am not

We're losing a chance to win
Even though it changes what we stand for

I can barely remember
The sound of your laugh or the touch of your tears
Because it's been so long
Since you laughed, cryied, showed anything at all

Why don't you just let go
Lose your stubordness and try

Have you any emotions
Or are you shallow as a pond and not yet lived

We're losing a chance to win
Even though it changes what we stand for

Why am I so lost
Even though I know for sure were I want to go

[patricksullivan]

cmon, is it that bad???

[Speenis]

There is no recording, 99% of the people that browse this forum want to hear people play. After saying that, I must admit that I'm not very good at critiquing lyrics, but I liked it. Nice work.

[patricksullivan]

heh yeah, i am currently using an old laptop so i don't really have any structure to record. but as soon as i am able i'll post it here.