So much more - original - critique please

[Tranman66]

new original. please critique. THank you.

http://s27.yousendit.com/d.aspx?id=0967 ... 5WTQYI24A2

So much more
by KMT

Lonely times i feel
rememmemberances of you
to every sight i seek
and the words from your mouth
i am so close to you
a touch away but yet do you know
the truth after our good times
so close but unreachable

oh baby
sweet dreams i can only dream
sadness i can only bear
but you, so priceless you are
we have been good friends
but not lovers
if it could only be
a dream comes true


Bridge:
Will i regret
if our friendship is gone?
Will i be happy
to seek for something so much more?

Chorus:
Please, run into my arms
and let it be for the night
let loose and come to me
lets make memories
and together we will talk
all night long
all day long
as long i as i can see you

Beyond all i can see
you will not leave me
all the risks in the world
can not take you away
i will be silent
and let all be good
as it is
as we are

[mangold]

theres some undesireable buzzing... and i dont think rememmemberances is a word... the vocals grow annoying... but other than that its pretty good. keep postin man

[Tranman66]

lol sorry its rememberances

[JamesMatthews]

Nice tune guy.
I love yo chords. U'd need a changing chorus or a bridge.
Your voice, it's very interesting. You've got a lots a potential man. You just can't use it to it's maximum now. With time.
We're always learning...

And we always suck tho
James