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Matty Boom · Unread post by **Matty Boom** » Thu Dec 30, 2004 11:03 pm

this is called 'nobody told me'

i wrote it in like 20 minutes today and recorded in 10 minutes (yea, that's my spurts, in 2 months i'll write another song in 20 minutes)

but yea, just a simple little tune...tell me how you like it, and any critiques to my voice would be appreciated too

here are the lyrics:

hold another cigarette
up to the flame
burns to the butt
and things are still all the same

the wind come and blow the ash away
just like our memories from yesterday

nobody told me
i'd be without you
nobody told me
i'd never stop missing you

i turn to the man
say how about another one
says i'll pour the drink
and you tell me whats been done

this god damned god
took her away from me
without that girl
who the hell am i supposed to be

nobody told me
i'd be without you
nobody told me
i'd never stop missing you

here's the link: http://mmasarik.dmbtabs.com/nobodytoldme.mp3

mangold · Unread post by **mangold** » Thu Dec 30, 2004 11:08 pm

this is kinda repetitive for me. the same progression over and over and over. the lyrics are good though. im not sure how i feel about the singing rythm its got no hook. the "never start missin you" when the guitar stops it close, but not quite there. good work overall. keep postin

edit: good vocal work

Tranman66 · Unread post by **Tranman66** » Thu Dec 30, 2004 11:11 pm

i like your voice. But i'd like to see more melody into your voice with a noticable chorus. This still need to be developed. Maybe a little flare in your guitar to make things interesting. But i like it and you should really develop it more.

onid41 · Unread post by **onid41** » Thu Dec 30, 2004 11:23 pm

Yeah you have a good voice and the chorus is pretty decent, but the guitar part is kinda repetitive, it needs some fills or something. But its definately a song that could be worked on , id give it a 6.5.

MWR · Unread post by **MWR** » Thu Dec 30, 2004 11:52 pm

praisedave wrote:this is kinda repetitive for me. the same progression over and over and over. the lyrics are good though. im not sure how i feel about the singing rythm its got no hook. the "never start missin you" when the guitar stops it close, but not quite there. good work overall. keep postin

Good call. That's more of a pre-chorus so maybe try going into a chorus the second time around.
I'm liking these lyrics. They're a little clumsy at times though. I'd prefer them to be more rhythmic. Maybe some rests here and there to get them more "in-line" with the guitar.
Nice job Matty. Keep 'em coming.

deceptivehero · Unread post by **deceptivehero** » Fri Dec 31, 2004 11:28 am

I enjoyed it and your voice is even better then the last recording you made, but I would also suggest maybe a bit more of a chorus sound as well.

mangold · Unread post by **mangold** » Fri Dec 31, 2004 11:37 am

the thing with this is its good, but you're capable of better matty.

Matty Boom · Unread post by **Matty Boom** » Fri Dec 31, 2004 11:45 am

it wasn't an original that i put much effort into, like i said...what i'm really looking for is how my voice is progressing, and from the responses, it sounds like it's doing well

mangold · Unread post by **mangold** » Fri Dec 31, 2004 11:46 am

Matty Boom wrote:it wasn't an original that i put much effort into, like i said...what i'm really looking for is how my voice is progressing, and from the responses, it sounds like it's doing well

yeah it is. the singing rythm could use some attention, but thats not as much your voice as it is the alignment of it with the guitar.

dmbguitar718 · Unread post by **dmbguitar718** » Fri Dec 31, 2004 11:49 am

Matty Boom wrote:it wasn't an original that i put much effort into, like i said...what i'm really looking for is how my voice is progressing, and from the responses, it sounds like it's doing well

I liked it. You seem to be a big JJ fan.

I don't think this is the best song for us to critique your voice though. Maybe if you posted one that showcased your voice a bit more. I mean, this song is good, but I'll need to hear more vocals to critiqe.

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