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Unread post by martinstud17 » Wed Dec 15, 2004 2:50 pm

want to know what you guys think about this verse of the song im writing, it needs a chorus but i havent found anything i liked yet. my singing isnt that loud i was too far from the mic but it sounds alright. any suggestions would be awesome. thanks guys.

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Unread post by Tranman66 » Wed Dec 15, 2004 2:55 pm

i likey like it, i hope you work on this further. and extend the picking intro, thats good.
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Unread post by martinstud17 » Wed Dec 15, 2004 3:49 pm

thanks ill keep working on it ............
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Unread post by Willin » Wed Dec 15, 2004 4:06 pm

I really like the sound of it. Reminds me a lot of Howie Day. A real lot.

To give you some constructive criticism, I don't know if I agree with the intro. It sounds a bit "countryish" to me and it doesn't really match to my ear. Maybe fingerpicking some chords would be better or something, you should mess around with it.

Other than, keep it up and post the finished product.

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Unread post by martinstud17 » Wed Dec 15, 2004 4:07 pm

sounds good ill mess around with it
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Unread post by mangold » Wed Dec 15, 2004 4:11 pm

its pretty cool man, u a good singa too.
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Unread post by Tranman66 » Wed Dec 15, 2004 5:11 pm

yeah? sing, so i can hear, i dont recall
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Unread post by martinstud17 » Wed Dec 15, 2004 5:13 pm

Tranman66 wrote:yeah? sing, so i can hear, i dont recall
huh?

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Unread post by Tranman66 » Wed Dec 15, 2004 6:02 pm

martinstud17 wrote:
Tranman66 wrote:yeah? sing, so i can hear, i dont recall
huh?
dave said you can sing
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Unread post by martinstud17 » Wed Dec 15, 2004 6:02 pm

oo ok
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Unread post by martinstud17 » Thu Dec 16, 2004 11:06 am

any chord suggestions for a chorus. i dont know why i cant figure out chords for a chorus and its makin me mad. i have a capo on the second. ive been playing around with formations of d, g, and am but havent found anything i like. if anyone can help with a different chord that be great . yea....
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Unread post by Willin » Thu Dec 16, 2004 2:13 pm

What's the progression that you're playing for the verse?

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Unread post by martinstud17 » Thu Dec 16, 2004 2:23 pm

-------------2---3----------------------------------------------
-------------3---1---3----3---1--------------------------------
-------------2---0---2----0---0--------------------------------
-----------------2---0----4---2--------------------------------
---------------------0----5---3---------------------------------
---------------------3-------------------------------------------

sorry.......i dont know the names for some of those chords
and remember i have a capo in the 2nd

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Unread post by mangold » Thu Dec 16, 2004 2:43 pm

ker-fix

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E-2-3-------- 
B-3-1-3-3-1--
G-2-0-2-0-0--
D---2-0-4-2--
A-----0-5-3--
E-----3------
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Unread post by martinstud17 » Thu Dec 16, 2004 2:48 pm

howd you line it up straight?
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