Check out my song please

[YouNeverNo41]

Alright this is my first time recording with my buddy, and also the first time posting this so tell me if it doesnt work. The song is called "For Sale", and please excuse some minor mistakes in the recording because it was my first time.

http://www.angelfire.com/crazy3/youneverno410/
(Its located in the middle of the page, "My favorite websites")
Please post all comments

[You_Enjoy_Myself]

I liked it, some pretty fast and smooth lead runs throughout the whole thing. Pretty common progression and chords used, but it sounded good. The vocals were average, nothing that really stood out about them, they were neither really good, or bad. Overall, I liked it though.

[YouNeverNo41]

thank you, by the way i just listened to your original song as well...very impressive...any other comments>

[YouNeverNo41]

no good??

[Mulletman]

not trying to be an asshole here. this music just really isn't my style i guess. sounds like stuff i'd play to get a chick to sleep with me. it just has a shallow sort of feel to it.
speaking technically now:
bring down the guitar in the mix and bring up the vocals. i can't hear any bass at all. i agree, i've heard the progressions used in this quite a few times before. try to smooth it out. the lead has really nice parts. the song has a really choppy feel to it. seems rushed too, try and slow it down a tad. you ask, i tell.

[YouNeverNo41]

not trying to be an asshole here. this music just really isn't my style i guess. sounds like stuff i'd play to get a chick to sleep with me. it just has a shallow sort of feel to it.
speaking technically now:
bring down the guitar in the mix and bring up the vocals. i can't hear any bass at all. i agree, i've heard the progressions used in this quite a few times before. try to smooth it out. the lead has really nice parts. the song has a really choppy feel to it. seems rushed too, try and slow it down a tad. you ask, i tell.

thanks a bunch man, thats the constuctive criticism i need

[filmdude100cms]

i liked it, kinda an interesting cross between the allman brothers though, and phish... lyrics didnt seem like much though, but what can i say, thats up for debate between everyman... but its good.

[YouNeverNo41]

i liked it, kinda an interesting cross between the allman brothers though, and phish... lyrics didnt seem like much though, but what can i say, thats up for debate between everyman... but its good.

yeah while recording, we had issues with the lyrics