I really liked it matty...cool riff man. Nice and mellow. I dig the lyrics too...good lines.
As far as critiquing goes, your voice sounds a little more nasal than the last couple of recordings you've put up. And you know I'm a fan of the simple stuff...but I think this would benefit a lot from a funky little breakdown of some sort. Just a thought. Good job man...you've been really impressive as of late.
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thanks michael!mbgreen wrote:I really liked it matty...cool riff man. Nice and mellow. I dig the lyrics too...good lines.
As far as critiquing goes, your voice sounds a little more nasal than the last couple of recordings you've put up. And you know I'm a fan of the simple stuff...but I think this would benefit a lot from a funky little breakdown of some sort. Just a thought. Good job man...you've been really impressive as of late.
i might try to incorporate some little funky thing into it...though i think this might as far as this song goes...i can't really show it to the person i wrote it for...but it'd be nice to rock it out still, thanks again
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