an original i wrote today
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an original i wrote today
here's an original i wrote in about an hour today, it just kinda came out of me so i figured i better record it...it's called 'don't give up on me'
here are the lyrics:
oh darlin think about the good days
oh darlin think about what we used to be
don't tell me it's not still there inside
whatever happened to you and me
don't give up on me
these cold days will pass
harsh wind and grey skies
it just can't last
i go through this world i don't see any colors
nothings as bright as that blonde in your hair
please just call me one more time
please just tell me that you still care
don't give up on me
these cold days will pass
harsh wind and grey skies
it just can't last
i remember
the last time i held you
i remember
begging to not let go
i remember
you driving away
i remember
i remember
you know i see you oh all the time
when i'm awake and and when i dream
please come back to me
i'll be all you ask me to be
don't give up on me
these cold days will pass
harsh wind and grey skies
it just can't last
so, let me know what you think...i'm still working on the voice thing, so let me know if i'm going in the right direction there and maybe tell me what you think of the song too...thanks a lot guys!
http://mmasarik.dmbtabs.com/dontgiveuponme.mp3
here are the lyrics:
oh darlin think about the good days
oh darlin think about what we used to be
don't tell me it's not still there inside
whatever happened to you and me
don't give up on me
these cold days will pass
harsh wind and grey skies
it just can't last
i go through this world i don't see any colors
nothings as bright as that blonde in your hair
please just call me one more time
please just tell me that you still care
don't give up on me
these cold days will pass
harsh wind and grey skies
it just can't last
i remember
the last time i held you
i remember
begging to not let go
i remember
you driving away
i remember
i remember
you know i see you oh all the time
when i'm awake and and when i dream
please come back to me
i'll be all you ask me to be
don't give up on me
these cold days will pass
harsh wind and grey skies
it just can't last
so, let me know what you think...i'm still working on the voice thing, so let me know if i'm going in the right direction there and maybe tell me what you think of the song too...thanks a lot guys!
http://mmasarik.dmbtabs.com/dontgiveuponme.mp3
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I can hear both dave and jack johnson in there. haha. i lvoe seeing how people's influences come through in their originals
i like this quite a bit. your lyrics are awesome. and your voice is getting damn good.
my first instinct is to say that the guitar work is alittle repetitive with that rhythm, but it grew on me. ncely done matty.
i like this quite a bit. your lyrics are awesome. and your voice is getting damn good.
my first instinct is to say that the guitar work is alittle repetitive with that rhythm, but it grew on me. ncely done matty.
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what...i've never even heard of dave matthews or jack johnsoni-am-me wrote:I can hear both dave and jack johnson in there. haha. i lvoe seeing how people's influences come through in their originals
i like this quite a bit. your lyrics are awesome. and your voice is getting damn good.
my first instinct is to say that the guitar work is alittle repetitive with that rhythm, but it grew on me. ncely done matty.

thanks for the critique mikey!
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thats friggon awsome... tab maybe?
edit: i must be honset tho, im not a huge fan of your voice. it sounds good just not my style.
edit: i must be honset tho, im not a huge fan of your voice. it sounds good just not my style.
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care to be more specific about what you don't like?praisedave wrote:thats friggon awsome... tab maybe?
edit: i must be honset tho, im not a huge fan of your voice. it sounds good just not my style.
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about your voice? i think it sounds like you're tryin to hard and it sounds, to me, like your voice doesnt quite have the sustain to sing what you wrote. thats just personal preference tho. i love evrything else about the song. the guitar, the writing, the organization. its on my "having a good day" playlist.Matty Boom wrote:care to be more specific about what you don't like?praisedave wrote:thats friggon awsome... tab maybe?
edit: i must be honset tho, im not a huge fan of your voice. it sounds good just not my style.
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little do you konw, i'm actually a really shitty singer and i'm just starting to not sound absolutely horrid...so i'm okay with itpraisedave wrote:about your voice? i think it sounds like you're tryin to hard and it sounds, to me, like your voice doesnt quite have the sustain to sing what you wrote. thats just personal preference tho. i love evrything else about the song. the guitar, the writing, the organization. its on my "having a good day" playlist.Matty Boom wrote:care to be more specific about what you don't like?praisedave wrote:thats friggon awsome... tab maybe?
edit: i must be honset tho, im not a huge fan of your voice. it sounds good just not my style.
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well congrats on the improvement thenMatty Boom wrote:little do you konw, i'm actually a really shitty singer and i'm just starting to not sound absolutely horrid...so i'm okay with itpraisedave wrote:about your voice? i think it sounds like you're tryin to hard and it sounds, to me, like your voice doesnt quite have the sustain to sing what you wrote. thats just personal preference tho. i love evrything else about the song. the guitar, the writing, the organization. its on my "having a good day" playlist.Matty Boom wrote:care to be more specific about what you don't like?praisedave wrote:thats friggon awsome... tab maybe?
edit: i must be honset tho, im not a huge fan of your voice. it sounds good just not my style.
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assholewinglet82 wrote:I didn't listen to it, but I bet it sounds like crap.
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kiss kiss, mofowinglet82 wrote:I didn't listen to it, but I bet it sounds like crap.
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