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Help with these lyrics

Unread post by jlee762000 » Tue Nov 09, 2004 3:01 pm

Hey guys I wrote these lyrics after reading one of my students poems from English class. Tell me what you think......

Falling Back

I guess its all over now
wishing all didnt turn out this way
Like a bad dream you linger in my mind
Trying my best to find my way out
But every thought falls back round

I'm not strong enough to say no
Caught between all i want and all i need
Not sticking with what's right
Trying my best to find my way out
But every thought falls back round

That's ok cuz all my love is fading
So stop all of this lying
I'm running with baby's steps fast as I can
Trying my best to find my way out
But every thought falls back round

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Unread post by Speenis » Tue Nov 09, 2004 4:36 pm

I like it.
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Unread post by jlee762000 » Wed Nov 10, 2004 2:47 pm

Hey thanks for the comment...any more....

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Unread post by jlee762000 » Thu Nov 11, 2004 7:38 am

any changes you all may see??????? helllllpppppppp!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Unread post by mdel21 » Thu Nov 11, 2004 12:56 pm

relax

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Unread post by Jer1400 » Thu Nov 11, 2004 5:11 pm

jlee762000 wrote:any changes you all may see??????? helllllpppppppp!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I don't mean to be rude, but you are teaching an English class? O.o
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Unread post by Swe dmbfan » Thu Nov 11, 2004 6:08 pm

mdel21 wrote:relax
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