new song TUNED 1.5 STEPS DOWN, IN TUNE BY THOSE STANDARDS.

[filmdude100cms]

no wait old song, wait, new song, new title, but old song, wtf ok, half of this song is about a year old, the rest is about 6 days old, the title is official as of yesterday...

http://www.cottonmouthstudios.com/cold_november.mp3

[filmdude100cms]

top (sorry)

[NoNotThat]

well hey, it's not an annoying top like

OMG Y RN'T U GUYS COMMENTING??!/1

I'll listen to it in a bit

[MWR]

The riff at the beggining is cool although not something I haven't heard before.
When you start thrashing around at 0:25 I can't tell if that's a cool progression or not because your guitars out of tune. Also to use Fatjacks words there's no "rhythmic cohesion". Your accenting random beats.
There's a somewhat interesting change at about 2:00 but it was too little too late.
You need to build on that first riff and take it places otherwise this just sounds like your strumming random shit. At three minutes it's way too long to hold my attention. If this is staying as an instrumental your gonna have to fit some melody in there somewhere. Otherwise I'd turn it off after the first minute.
I got a glimpse of what you were going for but that was it. Still got a long way to go before you call this a song.

Good day sir.

[Swe dmbfan]

i like the riff

[filmdude100cms]

well there are lyrics, but as ive said, i cant sing. and i did some improv on this. if i took the echo and ambiance effect off, youd hear it better...
and it was outa tune purposley, tuned 1 and 1/2 step down, and it was ontune to that. say it 1,000 times it wasnt, i tuned it 20 secs before i recorded.

[MWR]

well there are lyrics, but as ive said, i cant sing. and i did some improv on this. if i took the echo and ambiance effect off, youd hear it better...
and it was outa tune purposley, tuned 1 and 1/2 step down, and it was ontune to that. say it 1,000 times it wasnt, i tuned it 20 secs before i recorded.

This isn't the "critique the critique" forum. Take what I said or leave it, don't try and convince me otherwise.

[filmdude100cms]

well there are lyrics, but as ive said, i cant sing. and i did some improv on this. if i took the echo and ambiance effect off, youd hear it better...
and it was outa tune purposley, tuned 1 and 1/2 step down, and it was ontune to that. say it 1,000 times it wasnt, i tuned it 20 secs before i recorded.

This isn't the "critique the critique" forum. Take what I said or leave it, don't try and convince me otherwise.

im not trying to convice you otherwise. you say the guitar was out of tune, it was tuned to what i wanted, and was dead on. you said it was instrumental, it isnt, there are lyrics, im lookin for someone to sing currently, and im getting up recordings for people to hear my playing so i can find a singer. and somethings were hard to hear since i had some effects on. if you want me to put a mic infront of my soundhole and do it acoustic so you can hear what im sayin ill do that, doesnt matter to me.

[MWR]

1.It's clear that your gutir can't handle the a 1 1/2 step drop. Sure you tuned it spot on but the problem lies in the intonation.

2. I said IF this is an instrumental...

Bottom line is that it was incomplete and there's not much substance there beyond the little riff at the beggining. If a song has lyrics but nobody to sing them put it on the back burner until you find a vocalist.

[filmdude100cms]

well there are lyrics, but as ive said, i cant sing. and i did some improv on this. if i took the echo and ambiance effect off, youd hear it better...
and it was outa tune purposley, tuned 1 and 1/2 step down, and it was ontune to that. say it 1,000 times it wasnt, i tuned it 20 secs before i recorded.

This isn't the "critique the critique" forum. Take what I said or leave it, don't try and convince me otherwise.

im not trying to convice you otherwise. you say the guitar was out of tune, it was tuned to what i wanted, and was dead on. you said it was instrumental, it isnt, there are lyrics, im lookin for someone to sing currently, and im getting up recordings for people to hear my playing so i can find a singer. and somethings were hard to hear since i had some effects on. if you want me to put a mic infront of my soundhole and do it acoustic so you can hear what im sayin ill do that, doesnt matter to me.

[MWR]

1.It's clear that your gutir can't handle the a 1 1/2 step drop. Sure you tuned it spot on but the problem lies in the intonation.

2. I said IF this is an instrumental...

Bottom line is that it was incomplete and there's not much substance there beyond the little riff at the beggining. If a song has lyrics but nobody to sing them put it on the back burner until you find a vocalist.

[filmdude100cms]

1.It's clear that your gutir can't handle the a 1 1/2 step drop. Sure you tuned it spot on but the problem lies in the intonation.

2. I said IF this is an instrumental...

Bottom line is that it was incomplete and there's not much substance there beyond the little riff at the beggining. If a song has lyrics but nobody to sing them put it on the back burner until you find a vocalist.

im kinda usin this to find a vocalist, and then move forward.

[myxomatosis]

the first riff is kind of cool... when it changes at about 26 seconds it makes me want to stop listening... and I did

That guitar wasn't in tune!

[dmbguitar718]

What they're saying is that you're guitar isn't in tune - even if it is 1 and 1/2 step down.

[Ryeguy]

im not sure if this is a dumb question.. . but can you tell me where the chorus and verse are?