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Unread post by Lou » Mon May 12, 2003 5:43 pm

no lyrics (sry folks :D ) and it wasnt as good as id like it to be, but oh well......here ya go:

http://www.angelfire.com/alt/lou4140/

P.S. i know i suck. be gentle........yes thats right, I KNOW I SUCK. And some of u might not be able to figure out the suprise.....but lets see if ya can

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Unread post by hd28v » Mon May 12, 2003 6:06 pm

Lou, dont be so hard on yourself. It was not bad at all. I have not tried to play this song yet so I cant comment to much. However, some things came to mind. Play around with the rhythm a bit but more and the bass notes and try to be smoother and softer in your struming. I assoicate this Dave song with his gentle, lovey dovey songs. Keep working at it and sturming away. Your practice is paying off I can tell.
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Unread post by MWR » Mon May 12, 2003 10:21 pm

I would do two things: Make it a bit more light and airy like hd28v stated and I would get rid of the consecutive down strokes on the G. The rhythm should be the same (down up down) after the bass notes. Great start though.

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Wed May 14, 2003 2:36 pm

cool stuff...I guess I am out of the Dave ring, because I still don't know this one well enough to crituiqe fully :(...but it does sound cool...clean it up some and it would be a real treat to listen to man :wink:


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Unread post by Lou » Fri May 23, 2003 9:07 pm

i cant think of anything to record.....im drawin a blank :(

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Fri May 23, 2003 9:18 pm

do classical gas or something different ;)
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Unread post by Lou » Fri May 23, 2003 9:45 pm

hahaha.......while im at it i could just do stream with my teeth. :lol:

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Unread post by Lou » Fri May 23, 2003 9:58 pm

im thinkin grey st......maybe even with *gasp* vocals. And if my singing is anything like my guitar playin, y'all are gonna wanna sue me for abuse :lol:

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