"The Fall" - My first complete original song...

billywestom · Unread post by **billywestom** » Thu May 01, 2003 11:53 am

I am calling it "The Fall" for now. The melody sounds awfully familiar, but that always happens when I come up with something. Let me know if it sounds familiar and I can work on it. It is very basic, and is still a work in progress. All critiques very welcome. Anyways, peace.

The Fall

mbgreen · Unread post by **mbgreen** » Thu May 01, 2003 1:14 pm

I liked the lyrics on this one, they really fit the chord progression well...and the little lead part was a good tempo and fit really well with the song. With a little vocal practice, this could be a pretty good little song...it sounds like maybe you need to breath when youre singing, or sing a little more from the diaphragm? I dont know, Im no voice coach. The one thing I would advise is getting rid of whatever effect it is you run your stuff through, and leave it clean. It sounds like Im listening to the song underwater with that effect.

Nice original Billy. I enjoyed it.

billywestom · Unread post by **billywestom** » Thu May 01, 2003 1:26 pm

mbgreen wrote:I liked the lyrics on this one, they really fit the chord progression well...and the little lead part was a good tempo and fit really well with the song. With a little vocal practice, this could be a pretty good little song...it sounds like maybe you need to breath when youre singing, or sing a little more from the diaphragm? I dont know, Im no voice coach. The one thing I would advise is getting rid of whatever effect it is you run your stuff through, and leave it clean. It sounds like Im listening to the song underwater with that effect. Nice original Billy. I enjoyed it.

ok i will get rid of that effect if and when i record it again. i definitely wasnt singing to my full ability, but i do need work. thanks for the reply, appreciated

ryopan · Unread post by **ryopan** » Thu May 01, 2003 2:52 pm

good stuff man. i liked the overall feel of the song. i really like the "keep your feet on the ground part." was real nice. the solos were nice too. your voice sounds good but maybe if you sang a bit louder. good stuff.
ryan

billywestom · Unread post by **billywestom** » Thu May 01, 2003 3:07 pm

yeah i probably could have sang louder. thanks again

DustyDave · Unread post by **DustyDave** » Thu May 01, 2003 3:31 pm

Great song Billy , could have had a little louder vocal level , but all in all nice guitar playing , great rhythm , good emotional feeling in the vocals

Trippin Hillbilly · Unread post by **Trippin Hillbilly** » Thu May 01, 2003 3:36 pm

Jeez dood, i liked that alot.....i've actually got it stuck in my head....''keep your feet on the ground, keep your head in the clouds...''

Very nice man

billywestom · Unread post by **billywestom** » Thu May 01, 2003 4:00 pm

wow thanks everybody...didnt expect such a response. :shock:

hopefully soon i will come up with some vocals for the other two riffs i have. thanks again, any suggestions besides vocal volume?

DustyDave · Unread post by **DustyDave** » Thu May 01, 2003 10:32 pm

billywestom wrote:wow thanks everybody...didnt expect such a response. hopefully soon i will come up with some vocals for the other two riffs i have. thanks again, any suggestions besides vocal volume?

Yeah , post some damn tabs lol :lol:

billywestom · Unread post by **billywestom** » Thu May 01, 2003 10:33 pm

DustyDave wrote:
billywestom wrote:wow thanks everybody...didnt expect such a response. hopefully soon i will come up with some vocals for the other two riffs i have. thanks again, any suggestions besides vocal volume?
Yeah , post some damn tabs lol

i have all the tabs to the songs on my comp, but i really do wonder if they could be stolen. i know it is sort of egotistical or narcissistic to believe that someone would even want to take my songs, but i am hesitant. but then again, someone could probably easily just tab it out themselves by listening, so hmmmm

DustyDave · Unread post by **DustyDave** » Thu May 01, 2003 10:49 pm

Yup if people spended the time on it .... Besides the videos and tabs on this site that many people uses .... That would be theft as well if that was what people really wanted ....

Im just here to have fun and help out when i can , and i liked that tune , but fine if you don't wanna share :cry:

billywestom · Unread post by **billywestom** » Thu May 01, 2003 10:53 pm

DustyDave wrote:Yup if people spended the time on it .... Besides the videos and tabs on this site that many people uses .... That would be theft as well if that was what people really wanted ....

Im just here to have fun and help out when i can , and i liked that tune , but fine if you don't wanna share

ok, ok, i am workin on it. check back in a sec

billywestom · Unread post by **billywestom** » Thu May 01, 2003 11:01 pm

ok i have the tab up for that specific song, but for the other two the tabs are in the wrong places. i will fix it in a few minutes, i gotta leave very shortly

billywestom · Unread post by **billywestom** » Thu May 01, 2003 11:32 pm

Ok, one more post. Everything is in order. I switched to the IUMA site the other day, so soon i will not have to worry about bandwidth

DustyDave · Unread post by **DustyDave** » Fri May 02, 2003 7:08 am

lol its all good Billy , i would like a tab for it because i enjoy the tune , but my comments above were more or less a little joke , don't take it personal :lol:

PS you made a little mistake on Untitled #3 , its the same tab as Untitled #2 ... just letting you know

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"The Fall" - My first complete original song...

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