An Old Original

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An Old Original

Unread post by AdamCU81 » Wed Apr 30, 2003 6:19 pm

I just found this song on my computer that I recorded on June 30, 2001. It's kind of cool. I named it #14 at the time, so that's what I'll call it.....how original. Its at my site:

http://www.iuma.com/IUMA/Bands/Adam_Weiss/index-1.html


Please let me know what you think.
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Unread post by mbgreen » Wed Apr 30, 2003 9:25 pm

I really like your voice and the pace of the melody on this one. The only suggestion I would have is maybe a build up at the end, right at the 3:35 mark. (Illusion in your mind) I think you should maybe try to pick up the volume on the vocs here, and throw some more raw emotion into it. It would climax well, or at least in my opinion. Pretty damn good man, I enjoyed it.
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Unread post by AdamCU81 » Thu May 01, 2003 1:01 am

thanks a lot michael...that is definately helpful critisism.
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