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New Original Material...

Unread post by DmbSid » Sun Feb 15, 2004 12:13 am

Here is a link to a song I wrote called Swim With Me...

Give it a listen and tell me what you think...Thanks

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/craigpagemusic.htm
Mr. Page wants out...

"What is written without effort is in general read without pleasure" -- Samuel Johnson
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Unread post by Matty Boom » Sun Feb 15, 2004 12:23 am

it was alright, but i kinda felt like it wasn't takin me anywhere really ya know? it was worth the listen though, don't get me wrong...keep postin
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Unread post by Easy E » Sun Feb 15, 2004 2:15 am

matty's a girl
Cor wrote:I mentioned awhile ago trying to bang this huge near 7 foot woman I know. Hit it last night. I got manhandled, it was sweet.
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Unread post by Matty Boom » Sun Feb 15, 2004 2:18 am

i'm hotter than your life
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Unread post by MWR » Sun Feb 15, 2004 2:19 am

I think this would be a lot better if the recording was fuller. Your vocals are decent, certainly not as bad as some I've heard around here. I think they have a pleasant nature to them but you really need to polish them up. Put more emotion into it.
This could easily have been 2 minutes shorter. It didn't move away from the verse riff at all. Get a chorus/bridge and it will make the song a lot better. What you should do is fix some of this stuff and have it critiqued agaain but nobody ever does that.
Nice job and keep it up.
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Unread post by horsmar15 » Tue Feb 17, 2004 2:07 am

I thought your vocals were good. Guitar sound quallity was not as good though. As for the song itself, it was alright but didnt seem to go anywhere. Mabye you should work out some other parts too it. Anyhow, it is nice to see some originals, and yours was a good listen
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