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my first original here for ya'll

Unread post by Matty Boom » Thu Jan 29, 2004 10:14 am

take a listen and let me know what ya think

(if you don't hold my lack of critiquing against me lately :) )

http://www.angelfire.com/mech/mattyboom/no_name.mp3
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Unread post by isaac » Thu Jan 29, 2004 10:33 am

the riff gets a little too repetetive sometimes. the lyrics were good, but because the riff was repeated over and over, it got sort of distracting, and grating in a way.

nice part, though. reminded me of the pink panther theme song.

the singing/talking was all right, but because there was confusion as to what you were doing, i didn't know how to critique this. you went out of key sometimes, but other times you sounded like you'd be perfect for country, and that's a compliment even if neither of us like country. ;)

i liked it overall, but could still use some work. :)
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Unread post by juineaux » Thu Jan 29, 2004 10:54 am

I feel the same way as isaac feels, this is good, but the riff(kinda jack johnsonish, but not too much) can get a little boring near the end. The vocals are cool, they need a little tightining, but you have your own style. Good job overall, just needs a little more-

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Unread post by Matty Boom » Thu Jan 29, 2004 11:09 am

thanks for the feedback guys, you knock my one sock and one walking cast off
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Unread post by ericwormann » Thu Jan 29, 2004 2:53 pm

i have nothing to add, i just agree with the other two posts.

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Unread post by ec_costanzo » Thu Jan 29, 2004 3:14 pm

Very cool i like the lyrics
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Unread post by DmbSid » Thu Jan 29, 2004 4:18 pm

It was a cool little riff...I liked the lyrics a lot too...good job with the recording quality...that is something I have a problem with...But overall I liked it.
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Unread post by AdamCU81 » Fri Jan 30, 2004 3:29 am

This is a fun song even though the story is kind of sad. I agree with the guys above. The singing could be more on key at times. You should find a different slapping progression that would fill in the chorus or verse nicely. Overall, I enjoyed it and liked the story.

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Unread post by Matty Boom » Fri Jan 30, 2004 12:38 pm

lol...i don't like the story, cause it's true and it sucks, lol
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Unread post by horsmar15 » Fri Jan 30, 2004 3:30 pm

I am not neglecting this, ive been trying to download it a couple of times now but my schools network is slow and bogged down so it keeps getting cut off. So from like the 30 seconds ive heard of it it sounded cool :D

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