My Ants Marching Cover.... WOOT WOOT

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My Ants Marching Cover.... WOOT WOOT

Unread post by mangold » Thu Dec 23, 2004 7:42 pm

i took all of your comments from my stone cover into consideration. i took mwr's advice and recorded singing seperate, so it may be a bit off as far as alignment. i did a weird thing with the intro, if it sucks just tell me cause it might. 2 guitars in the beginning. Matt guest stared on bass (jazzbassistsomethin). me sing betta this time i think.

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Unread post by martinstud17 » Thu Dec 23, 2004 7:45 pm

i'd practice on singing a lot more. it sounds like you are just reading the lyrics. i like the guitar though sounds pretty good. all you need to do is improve the voice and your all set. practice makes perfect. * my voice is no good *!
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Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Thu Dec 23, 2004 8:19 pm

Your voice needs some work but don't give up, we've all been there.

Firstly, you're talking instead of singing and secondly the vocal melody isn't really there either. I'd recommend listening to the song a few more times paying most attention to daves voice. I'm not saying mimic him, because you should sing in your own voice, but try sing it in the right octave.

The guitar and bass wasn't bad at all.

Keep singing and posting.

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Unread post by Sciaracastro » Thu Dec 23, 2004 8:21 pm

I dont like the singing (yeah it's like u r just reading lyrics!)...the guitar is pretty nice (try to get a fuller sound though)...but in the "all the little ants are marching" part it seems like the timing is not good at all...

PS i cant sing :lol:

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Unread post by mangold » Thu Dec 23, 2004 8:37 pm

i really tried my best to sing and not talk this time around... i dont have great control over my voice tho, ill keep on workin. thanks for the comments everyone.

and yes it is off a bit in the breakdown Sciaracastro, thats why the volume is lower :)
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Unread post by MWR » Thu Dec 23, 2004 9:08 pm

The instrumentation is good. I think the overall problem is that you're too tense. It's like you're trying to avoid fucking up notes but at the same time you're not taking any risks or putting any real emotion into it. This should come with time though you should always be thinking about it.
I would comment on your singing but technically you're not singing. All of the notes are sitting way too low in your register. Judging by the tone of your voice you should be able to hit all of these notes comfortably save the falsetto ones. You've some how tricked yourself into thinking you're a bass.
All of your vocal problems stem from excess tension. The problem with Dave is that he hardly ever uses vibrato and it's a very good litmus test for vocal technique.
You should buy a book on singing technique. Roger Loves "Set your Voice Free" is great for begginers.

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Unread post by martinstud17 » Thu Dec 23, 2004 9:20 pm

i agree love's "set your voice free" really helps. i read most of it and use some of his exercises every now and then and it atcually improves your voice. i recommend giving it a try.
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Unread post by mangold » Thu Dec 23, 2004 9:41 pm

MWR wrote:The instrumentation is good. I think the overall problem is that you're too tense. It's like you're trying to avoid fucking up notes but at the same time you're not taking any risks or putting any real emotion into it. This should come with time though you should always be thinking about it.
I would comment on your singing but technically you're not singing. All of the notes are sitting way too low in your register. Judging by the tone of your voice you should be able to hit all of these notes comfortably save the falsetto ones. You've some how tricked yourself into thinking you're a bass.
All of your vocal problems stem from excess tension. The problem with Dave is that he hardly ever uses vibrato and it's a very good litmus test for vocal technique.
You should buy a book on singing technique. Roger Loves "Set your Voice Free" is great for begginers.
thanks mike, when i play this song live (with a different singer o' course) i do mix it up a bit, i stuck to the book here and i dont like it your right.

my singing does need improvement, and i dont sing higher because if i do the throws of puberty make my voice crack like a mofo. i will see if i can find that book next time im at my local music store, im intrigued.

again thanks for your comments!
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Unread post by DMBFan63 » Thu Dec 23, 2004 10:14 pm

praisedave wrote:
MWR wrote:The instrumentation is good. I think the overall problem is that you're too tense. It's like you're trying to avoid fucking up notes but at the same time you're not taking any risks or putting any real emotion into it. This should come with time though you should always be thinking about it.
I would comment on your singing but technically you're not singing. All of the notes are sitting way too low in your register. Judging by the tone of your voice you should be able to hit all of these notes comfortably save the falsetto ones. You've some how tricked yourself into thinking you're a bass.
All of your vocal problems stem from excess tension. The problem with Dave is that he hardly ever uses vibrato and it's a very good litmus test for vocal technique.
You should buy a book on singing technique. Roger Loves "Set your Voice Free" is great for begginers.
thanks mike, when i play this song live (with a different singer o' course) i do mix it up a bit, i stuck to the book here and i dont like it your right.

my singing does need improvement, and i dont sing higher because if i do the throws of puberty make my voice crack like a mofo. i will see if i can find that book next time im at my local music store, im intrigued.

again thanks for your comments!
Hm..your voice still cracks and you're how old? :lol:

It was a good cover, I don't like the way you play the chorus, but it works out well(not really play, but sing/ play it at the same time) and I suggest maybe putting the funk intro on there for some good effect, it'd be sweet with the bass
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Unread post by mangold » Thu Dec 23, 2004 10:16 pm

DMBFan63 wrote:
praisedave wrote:
MWR wrote:The instrumentation is good. I think the overall problem is that you're too tense. It's like you're trying to avoid fucking up notes but at the same time you're not taking any risks or putting any real emotion into it. This should come with time though you should always be thinking about it.
I would comment on your singing but technically you're not singing. All of the notes are sitting way too low in your register. Judging by the tone of your voice you should be able to hit all of these notes comfortably save the falsetto ones. You've some how tricked yourself into thinking you're a bass.
All of your vocal problems stem from excess tension. The problem with Dave is that he hardly ever uses vibrato and it's a very good litmus test for vocal technique.
You should buy a book on singing technique. Roger Loves "Set your Voice Free" is great for begginers.
thanks mike, when i play this song live (with a different singer o' course) i do mix it up a bit, i stuck to the book here and i dont like it your right.

my singing does need improvement, and i dont sing higher because if i do the throws of puberty make my voice crack like a mofo. i will see if i can find that book next time im at my local music store, im intrigued.

again thanks for your comments!
Hm..your voice still cracks and you're how old? :lol:

It was a good cover, I don't like the way you play the chorus, but it works out well(not really play, but sing/ play it at the same time) and I suggest maybe putting the funk intro on there for some good effect, it'd be sweet with the bass
im 16 and my voice has been crackin when i try to sing snything high for like 4 years... i was thinkin bass intro too, but we couldnt come up with one that really worked
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Unread post by DMBFan63 » Thu Dec 23, 2004 10:22 pm

praisedave wrote:
DMBFan63 wrote:
praisedave wrote:
MWR wrote:The instrumentation is good. I think the overall problem is that you're too tense. It's like you're trying to avoid fucking up notes but at the same time you're not taking any risks or putting any real emotion into it. This should come with time though you should always be thinking about it.
I would comment on your singing but technically you're not singing. All of the notes are sitting way too low in your register. Judging by the tone of your voice you should be able to hit all of these notes comfortably save the falsetto ones. You've some how tricked yourself into thinking you're a bass.
All of your vocal problems stem from excess tension. The problem with Dave is that he hardly ever uses vibrato and it's a very good litmus test for vocal technique.
You should buy a book on singing technique. Roger Loves "Set your Voice Free" is great for begginers.
thanks mike, when i play this song live (with a different singer o' course) i do mix it up a bit, i stuck to the book here and i dont like it your right.

my singing does need improvement, and i dont sing higher because if i do the throws of puberty make my voice crack like a mofo. i will see if i can find that book next time im at my local music store, im intrigued.

again thanks for your comments!
Hm..your voice still cracks and you're how old? :lol:

It was a good cover, I don't like the way you play the chorus, but it works out well(not really play, but sing/ play it at the same time) and I suggest maybe putting the funk intro on there for some good effect, it'd be sweet with the bass
im 16 and my voice has been crackin when i try to sing snything high for like 4 years... i was thinkin bass intro too, but we couldnt come up with one that really worked
heh, I'm 16 and my voice only cracks on the weirdest occasions..just like..out of no where bam!
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Unread post by mbgreen » Thu Dec 23, 2004 10:54 pm

The playing was pretty solid, but a little too rigid...there wasn't any percussion in the strum at all. No "chickas" if you know what I'm sayin. You're playing the right notes, but the song feels dead.

The voice, well, you've had good suggestions for that already.

Solid, but try to loosen up a bit. It'll help if you ever want to play like justin king. :wink:
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Unread post by Tranman66 » Thu Dec 23, 2004 11:25 pm

hey man, i first minute was decent, the rest was really weird in my opinion. the verse guitar is too technical, not much rhythm. you know what to do with your voice and thats fine. the way you play your verse gets annoying after the first minute imo. at the end it sounds like you're rapping, which is a lil funny. sorry anyway, keep posting! good effort.

oh yeah, moveeee upppp your octave! good day.
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Unread post by filmdude100cms » Fri Dec 24, 2004 12:18 am

work on singing, good music though.

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Unread post by filmdude100cms » Fri Dec 24, 2004 12:18 am

and learn vocal tempo.

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