Great Song!!! (My First Original)

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Great Song!!! (My First Original)

Unread post by AdamCU81 » Thu May 01, 2003 2:30 am

This is the first song I ever wrote, and I've written over 30 songs. I think it was written a little over two years ago. It was recorded just a few minutes ago as a single track with a Taylor 314ce, and I think it's my best recording of this song yet. It's called "With Me" and can be found at the following link:

http://www.iuma.com/IUMA/Bands/Adam_Weiss/index-1.html

I hope you enjoy!

P.S. Songs from this site sound 5 times better if you download and play the file as opposed to streaming it!!
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Unread post by DustyDave » Thu May 01, 2003 5:20 am

I like this :) got a calm country sorta feeling to it , and the lyrics are great .. i dig it :)
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Unread post by mbgreen » Thu May 01, 2003 1:33 pm

Wow, this one is very nice. Its got a good little style going to it. This sounds like it should be on some officially released cd, with a record contract going. The only qualm I had with it was the use of "Fuckin" in the chorus...I think the swearing sort of brings the song down to a more juvenile level intellectually, since I dont really feel its necessary to convey the meaning of what youre saying. But great job man...the little picking riff you've got going for that, combined with the melody, is a winner.
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Unread post by AdamCU81 » Thu May 01, 2003 2:41 pm

Thanks Michael and Dusty for the words of support. Much appreciated.
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Unread post by ryopan » Thu May 01, 2003 2:59 pm

nice song man. i liked "I've only begun to get to know you "- nice.
the guitar was nice and soothing. whats up with all the drug references? :)
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Unread post by AdamCU81 » Thu May 01, 2003 5:06 pm

thanks....i don't really remember what I was thinking when I wrote it, but I was probably a little intoxicated. The only drug reference I meant to put in was the weed one. I guess the extacy line could be interpreted as a drug reference, but I just meant utter bliss, not drugs. I've thought about changing the weed part, but the whole feeling of the song to me was kind of a nervous/desperation/one night stand kind of thing...and weed is definately relaxing in that situation.
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Unread post by Ando » Thu May 01, 2003 7:04 pm

great song man.. great lyrics
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