NEW ORIGINAL FROM PRAISE!!!! PLEASE CRIT!

[hmm69]

i think its cool very grace is gone feel to it but dont to be too much like dave do your own thing

[Tranman66]

yeah i agree on the two songs being similar. I like seagull better. this one is a little choppy for me, and feel like hte timing was off. and you might wanna change the way you use harmonics, it gets repetitive and boring. very good effort tho.

[mbgreen]

I thought this one was played a lot cleaner than the last one I heard from you...good job there. The timing on the fills was a lot better too. I'd have to agree that the two songs sound really similar. Your verse/fills particularly. Good job though, you're definitely improving. Keep at it.

[mangold]

thanks for the crits guys

[JazzBassist114]

not bad, man. I'm gonna try to write sum lyrics for it, if I can ever get around to it. email me the audacity file? I'll post it if I ever get around to finishing a vocal part for it. Well done.


oh, and i agree with mcinnis, you're good at guitar, but you don't need to incorporate that every time you write something. good music doesn't have to be hard to play.

[mangold]

the audacity file is too big. thanks for the crit though. you can get it from my portable stick drive jaunt

[katie]

sounds really nice. that first transition with the guitar after the intro could be a little smoother. perhaps a pause and a pluck of a few strings and then into the next different segment.

get's kind of crazy there with the tweeks into the high notes, loses a little bit of the flow. sounds like it could almost be two different songs completely.

sweet sound feels like a river walk on a sunny day and you get REAL excited when you look at that someone, the strumming is tender in some real nice spots.

good work.

vocals? might be difficult with this one. I enjoyed, thank you. and as always only an opinion.

good guitar man.

[mangold]

sounds really nice. that first transition with the guitar after the intro could be a little smoother. perhaps a pause and a pluck of a few strings and then into the next different segment.

get's kind of crazy there with the tweeks into the high notes, loses a little bit of the flow. sounds like it could almost be two different songs completely.

sweet sound feels like a river walk on a sunny day and you get REAL excited when you look at that someone, the strumming is tender in some real nice spots.

good work.

vocals? might be difficult with this one. I enjoyed, thank you. and as always only an opinion.

good guitar man.

thanks for the crit, and you speak very poetically.