Your Own lyrics

seanbryantkbq · Unread post by **seanbryantkbq** » Wed Jul 16, 2003 10:38 pm

We always talk about John Mayer sucking his nasty butt off when it comes to lyrics, and Dave sits like God (or Buddha, or Allah or whatever you believe) when it comes to writing songs, but what about are own lyrics? This post is dedicated to posting your own lyrics . Our first limelight is here in the threads.

gcom007 · Unread post by **gcom007** » Wed Jul 16, 2003 10:42 pm

seanbryantkbq wrote:We always talk about John Mayer sucking his nasty butt off when it comes to lyrics, and Dave sits like God (or Buddha, or Allah or whatever you believe) when it comes to writing songs, but what about are own lyrics? This post is dedicated to posting your own lyrics . Our first limelight is here in the threads.

my lyrics suck balls

seanbryantkbq · Unread post by **seanbryantkbq** » Wed Jul 16, 2003 10:49 pm

at least they dont suck anything else. :oops:

Just kiddin'
come on, just put some on
i tll be cool

isaac · Unread post by **isaac** » Wed Jul 16, 2003 11:46 pm

eh. well. all right.

"chase of faith"

a faith in faith for love to chase
a smile to pass the season tide
if i were to take a step out of my mind
i believe we could find grace

a like surprise i find in you
an idle teardrop dream in which you bloom
a simple majesty, placed among the stars
for which kings and queens dance holy

a binding will immerses me
where two things come to find
that hope fleeting has no catch
for as long as i worship you

inside my hands, i hold your place
where soft romance sings of future's time
a pleasant irony seeps through the eyes
made of clay and broken lines

yet what's holding on
but truth cast to love
and fingertips cry
of whispered things
i can find everything
in your skin

violenticecream88 · Unread post by **violenticecream88** » Thu Jul 17, 2003 2:18 am

i rewrote long black veil

my version

10 years ago this friday, is the day ill never forget
i walked out the door to begin my day, didnt give her a hug or a kiss
we had an argument that night, i dont remember what about
i should have said i loved her before i walked out
(chorus)
now i walk these streets in a long black veil
i visit her grave when the night winds wail
no body knows, nobody sees, nobody knows but me

never knew how much id miss her, till i didnt have her to hold
the guy who took her life from me, better be really f'n bold
she was walking to our apartment, with the intent to apologise
thats when i heard that gunshot, and saw the image thats in these eyes

(chorus)

friends and family, young and old, all mourned by that tree
but no one knew what i said, no one suffered as much as me
now i lay my head to rest, alone in our bed
i pray to god most every night, why does she have to be dead.

thats it
i was listenin to long black veil, and thinking how my cousins wife was murdered, so it fit to me.

tell me how much it sucks, heh

sinko25 · Unread post by **sinko25** » Thu Jul 17, 2003 1:11 pm

aw man, if only I could write lyrics like Dave, or even John Mayer. You guys who posted definately have some talent in that area, I'd love to see more.

geekmug · Unread post by **geekmug** » Thu Jul 17, 2003 5:06 pm

I really like long black viel.. and your lyrics to it are pretty good too.. a guy wearing a long black viel doesn't make much sense, but the symbolism stands, so it works ok. I find I need to add some words to get it to flow well, though.. I dunno if you are interested in my notes or not..

10 years ago this (cold) friday, is the day ill never forget
i walked out the door to begin my day, didnt give her a hug or a kiss (goodbye)
we had an argument that night (before), i dont remember whatever (it was for)
i should have said i loved her before i walked out (that god forsaken door)
(chorus)
now i walk these streets in a long black veil
i visit her grave when the night winds wail
no body knows, nobody sees, nobody knows but me

never knew how much id miss her, till i didnt have her to hold
the guy who took her life from me, better be really f'n bold
she was walking to our apartment, with the intent to apologize (to me)
thats when i heard that gunshot, and saw the image thats in these (damned) eyes

(chorus)

friends and family, young and old, all mourned by that tree (she sold)
but no one knew what i said, no one suffered as much as me
now i lay my head (down) to rest, alone in (my lover's) bed
i pray to god most every night, why does she have to be dead.

.. anyways, you might pace your words differently and it works out better without adding words.. for me, I need the extra words.. I made a junky mp3 of it 'cause I tought your version is so cool though.. I'll make a better one tonight probably.. oh the "she sold" .. couldn't think of anything that made sense and it seemed to work

seanbryantkbq · Unread post by **seanbryantkbq** » Thu Jul 17, 2003 8:20 pm

i like yalls lyrics
espesially issacs Chase of Faith
its very original to me.
here is another question(s)
how do you guys write your songs and what stuff do you write about. i need some ideas to write songs for my demo. i have about 4 to 5 finished songs that i like, but i ran out of ideas. keep postin lyrics yall/

P.S: Violenticecream88. sorry bout your cousins wife. if someone close to me was merdered, i dont know what id do

violenticecream88 · Unread post by **violenticecream88** » Fri Jul 18, 2003 6:47 pm

geek mug, i give you authors liscense to be creative. as for the "she sold" addition, the tree is in a graveyard, and the tombstone is at a tree, which is where i got that lyric, but what ever works.

yes, it was sad, but weve moved on. thanks for the replies.

DreaminBassMunky · Unread post by **DreaminBassMunky** » Fri Jul 18, 2003 11:20 pm

you're your own biggest critic personally i love blasting Kit Kat Jam and making up lyrics to that. I wrote some Phish induced lyrics on vacation and I'm gonna post em later.

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