Improv Jam/Song type thing (NO VOCALS)

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Improv Jam/Song type thing (NO VOCALS)

Unread post by Speenis » Mon Feb 09, 2004 1:11 am

http://www.geocities.com/bigspeen36/originaldemo.mp3
100% Improv'd. First original. I want some people's opinions on what they think is good/bad, etc.
HERE is another link:
http://www.angelfire.com/band2/bigspeen3436/index.html
click on original demo
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Unread post by Matty Boom » Mon Feb 09, 2004 1:20 am

it's a cool little ditty...it needs vocals or lead and i like how it changes mood pretty hard about a minute in
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Unread post by Matty Boom » Tue Feb 10, 2004 8:49 pm

bump to the top for speeny
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Unread post by fatjack » Tue Feb 10, 2004 10:30 pm

lot rhythm problems on that one, your meter changes pretty much the entire time. thats about it.
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Unread post by Speenis » Tue Feb 10, 2004 10:42 pm

fatjack wrote:lot rhythm problems on that one, your meter changes pretty much the entire time. thats about it.
good point, what do u think of it as a song though? Would you change anything besides just making the rhythm smoother?
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Unread post by fatjack » Tue Feb 10, 2004 10:45 pm

BigSpeen3436 wrote:
fatjack wrote:lot rhythm problems on that one, your meter changes pretty much the entire time. thats about it.
good point, what do u think of it as a song though? Would you change anything besides just making the rhythm smoother?
its extremely repetitive, you dont have any noticable changes that would separate sections. you need more drastic changes to diferrentiate between sections
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Unread post by Speenis » Tue Feb 10, 2004 11:01 pm

fatjack wrote:
BigSpeen3436 wrote:
fatjack wrote:lot rhythm problems on that one, your meter changes pretty much the entire time. thats about it.
good point, what do u think of it as a song though? Would you change anything besides just making the rhythm smoother?
its extremely repetitive, you dont have any noticable changes that would separate sections. you need more drastic changes to diferrentiate between sections
Sweet! Thanks a bunch Josh for the help :D
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Unread post by dmb_tatertot » Thu Feb 12, 2004 1:08 am

Hey, i enjoyed it but felt like it was lacking some differentiating between sections. The lack of change introduces repetition. The tempo is also all over the place. Overall though, i enjoyed. Keep it up.

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Unread post by fatjack » Thu Feb 12, 2004 5:08 pm

dmb_tatertot wrote:Hey, i enjoyed it but felt like it was lacking some differentiating between sections. The lack of change introduces repetition. The tempo is also all over the place. Overall though, i enjoyed. Keep it up.

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Unread post by DT » Thu Feb 12, 2004 5:26 pm

cool progressions, cant say anythign about it that hasnt already been said... nice work bro

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Unread post by Speenis » Fri Feb 13, 2004 8:57 pm

thanks for the replies guys, I'm still not sure what i'm gonna do with it yet but you'll see me repost a finished product in a few weeks
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