Uh Oh...it's an original recording from me, Coop, the jerk..

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Uh Oh...it's an original recording from me, Coop, the jerk..

Unread post by Coop23 » Wed Jan 14, 2004 4:01 pm

Alright, since some of you want to rip me to shreads since I gave an honest opinion to someone else's recording, here is your chance. This is a simplistic original song I wrote/played/sang/recorded at home on one take. It's somewhat hard to hear the vocals since I was sick at the time and also because all I used on this was one microphone.

Anyhow, have a listen and say what cha want, I don't sing in my band anyhow...lata And, by the way, I can't stress it enough that I meant no hurtfulness to DMB2Step in what I said, but still I'm sure some of you can't get past that...maybe some day :wink:

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Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Wed Jan 14, 2004 4:24 pm

that was actually prett good..kudos mister

oh that girl on your bands website, under the halloween pictures is SMOKIN'.. keep up the good work :lol:

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Unread post by Coop23 » Wed Jan 14, 2004 5:04 pm

thanks...that's actually my live-in girlfriend :lol:

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Unread post by Trippin Hillbilly » Wed Jan 14, 2004 5:18 pm

you live in your girlfriend? damn I would too :lol:

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Unread post by Coop23 » Wed Jan 14, 2004 5:21 pm

Ha...well, I'm not saying I "live" in her....but I do spend a lot of time there.... :P Just kiddin'....yeah, she's great!!

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Unread post by Coop23 » Wed Jan 14, 2004 10:50 pm

Wow...58 looks and only 1 response :roll: :wink:

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Unread post by fatjack » Wed Jan 14, 2004 10:57 pm

good solid guitar playing and stayed in key real well on the vocals, although your pitch wavered on the chorus when you hit those high notes.

i just thought the overall rhythm and progression of the song was kinda boring. the melody was real choppy, which just made the whole song seem to drag on. the progression was just way too repetitive. i liked the little theme you had going with the slide up on the high notes, but you should have put something in there to change it up a bit.

4.5/10
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Unread post by Coop23 » Thu Jan 15, 2004 12:52 am

fatjack wrote:good solid guitar playing and stayed in key real well on the vocals, although your pitch wavered on the chorus when you hit those high notes.

i just thought the overall rhythm and progression of the song was kinda boring. the melody was real choppy, which just made the whole song seem to drag on. the progression was just way too repetitive. i liked the little theme you had going with the slide up on the high notes, but you should have put something in there to change it up a bit.

4.5/10
That's cool....everyone has their own opinion ;) I do agree that it's repetive, but there are countless songs I could name that are written that way (ex: Ryan Adams). That's the only one that I've written that's repetive in that form, but it's all I have lying around that I did alone and I have no time to do another.

4.5 / 10..... :shock: lol!!

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Unread post by fatjack » Thu Jan 15, 2004 4:57 pm

Coop23 wrote:
4.5 / 10..... :shock: lol!!
dont feel bad, the highest i've given is an 8.5
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Unread post by TrippingBilly » Thu Jan 15, 2004 5:09 pm

fatjack wrote:
Coop23 wrote:
4.5 / 10..... :shock: lol!!
dont feel bad, the highest i've given is an 8.5
Pshh...Everyone's a critic! :wink:
As for the song, the guitar was great and all, but I would have liked to hear more of your voice -- gotta love those emotional male voices. Put some balls into it! :D

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Unread post by Speenis » Thu Jan 15, 2004 5:15 pm

TrippingBilly wrote:
fatjack wrote:
Coop23 wrote:
4.5 / 10..... :shock: lol!!
dont feel bad, the highest i've given is an 8.5
Pshh...Everyone's a critic! :wink:
As for the song, the guitar was great and all, but I would have liked to hear more of your voice -- gotta love those emotional male voices. Put some balls into it! :D
lol :lol: I just thought that was very funny. Carry on
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Unread post by GreedylilPig » Thu Jan 15, 2004 5:48 pm

I enjoyed it, although I must agree with Fatjack that it tends to drag on a little bit and the main riff is a bit repetitive. Not to say that's always a bad thing, but this type of song could have definitely used some more variations, such as the little riff at 4:04-4:05 or so.
All in all though, I was impressed. Nice job.
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