11th Hour By Firedancer86 ( listen! )

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11th Hour By Firedancer86 ( listen! )

Unread post by superman0710 » Mon Dec 02, 2002 11:57 pm

very cool stuff, especially the breakdown where it slows down

enjoy

(8.04 MB) http://www.rampromotions.com/11hour.mp3



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Unread post by Xoosh » Wed Dec 04, 2002 2:20 pm

Quit the flaming or i start banning =(

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Unread post by gcom007 » Wed Dec 04, 2002 2:24 pm

Xoosh wrote:Quit the flaming or i start banning =(

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Unread post by Xoosh » Wed Dec 04, 2002 2:27 pm

I cant remember, i just deleted all the posts. For the record, we're allowed to share music on the board. I ask that you all are cool with each other ... or else the community turns into one stupid negative bash party... which isnt fun and will make the quality people turn away. Im going to speak with Kanter about revising the setup of the board to a much simpler setup instead of having like 12 different boards on here... making it like 5... we'll see... becuase i for one would probably only post in here becuase it's one of the most trafficked parts of the site.

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Unread post by ticohans » Thu Dec 05, 2002 1:16 am

hey fire, here's my constructive criticism for your 11hour. Although it's not my style, there are some great core ideas here. But I don't think it would hurt if you changed it up just a little during the repeats. Something to provide variation. A kink in the rhythm, a different bend in the lick, something to add just a touch more spice. I agree with superman that it works better as it goes on and you change it up a little more. It could be a little fuller too, as throughout most of it, you have both the guitar and bass moving through fairly involved melodic lines. it needs a good rhythm guitar. the drums could also change it up a bit more. make it unpredictable.

these are all tweaking issues. like I said earlier, some great core ideas that just need a little more flushing out I think. hope I haven't been too harsh.

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Unread post by MattyTrane » Thu Dec 05, 2002 9:23 am

yea and cool song has something different and spectacular, thats what you have to get in this one, make it so that i wont be able to get the song out of my head.

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Thu Dec 05, 2002 12:21 pm

6StringSamurai wrote:yea and cool song has something different and spectacular, thats what you have to get in this one, make it so that i wont be able to get the song out of my head.

you mean a hook?


And I can't make the drums any better...they came from a stinkin' casio!

Its PROG...thats why it changes aand goes though different fazes...I basicly wanted to erite something with basic guitar and a catchy bass line (the bass was played from my les paul) that keeps running...If I did anything eldse to the rythm, it would be a clash of sounds...

And as for the "change-up", thats why the intro/main riff has the "high" on the neck 3 chords...(listen to the intro

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Unread post by MattyTrane » Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:10 pm

i mean what i said...

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:13 pm

6StringSamurai wrote:i mean what i said...
Yeah, often times it is reffered to as a "hook" :wink:
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Unread post by MattyTrane » Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:22 pm

thats great, i still mean what i said :wink:

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Unread post by gravedigger » Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:24 pm

6StringSamurai wrote:thats great, i still mean what i said :wink:
are you trying to say that what you said was what you meant? :? I'm confused.

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Unread post by MattyTrane » Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:26 pm

grrrrrrrrr lol

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:26 pm

6StringSamurai wrote:thats great, i still mean what i said :wink:
Sorry...just trying to add something extra to try and understand if thats what you ment...
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Unread post by MattyTrane » Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:27 pm

you understood just fine

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Unread post by firedancer86 » Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:28 pm

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