Something a bit different for me.

[lyrics101]

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The Lynching (or, Once Upon A Crooked Cat's Claw

Don't worry, it's an .mp3.

This one goes more into Cure/Pixies territory, I think. I tried to make the vocals more dirty, raw, even off at times, like elongated spoken-word.

a long, long, long time ago, when everything was wonderful..
yesterday's irrelevant: a long time ago.

i'm lonely, just lonely.

when i kept it too myself, (tucked away from everyone,
locked up tight, down deep inside) sandman coming after me;
gonna tear me all apart: an outing of the fingernails
just to feed your fucking cat, and now we go.

in here, it's lonely.

in here, it's lonely.
in here, it's so, so lonely.

walk away from it, and keep your head
held high; knees up when you tread on souls.
they grow up so fast, these kids these days.
i will rip him up, head to toe,
if he so much as lays a lip on yours.
(yours) are mine, and all you own.
let go of it. let go of him,
of me: i'm going.

in here, it's lonely remembering.

let go of him.

[Banjobach]

the guitar is what I like most about this song. Especially how the panned guitar parts play with and against each other. The vocal melody got on my nerves in the last verse. I also wasn't a fan of the modulation/pitch change of the synth at the end. This song feels mostly like experimentation. Again maybe its the way you sing it or perhaps all the other instruments in the background, but the lyrics are good stuff, however its hard to digest them for some reason, namely around and after "gonna tear me all apart: an outing of the fingernails."
Also I don't know if i should be critiquing at all because this is most definitely a different flavor of music than what I'm familiar with. I suppose what I just listed are reasons that make this song less compelling/listenable for me. I hope dmbtabs isn't the only place you post for musical input, because quite frankly, the feedback here is scarce at best. You posted this almost a week ago and I'm the first one to comment. I recommend the Harmony Central Songwriting forum. There's alot of different music influences there but they will give you more feedback than just "liked it "

[lyrics101]

Don't think of it in lines; think of it in complete thought groups.

When I kept it to myself (tucked away from everyone, locked up tight, down deep inside) [it was] the sandman coming after me.

As in, Sandman = bad dreams.

He's gonna tear me all apart. An out of the fingernails just to feed your fucking cat.

What's an outing of the fingernails? Torture. What's an analogy for a cat? A pussy. Putting me through hell just so you can feed your sexual appetite.

This is the only board where people find my lyrics confusing, and I'm convinced it's because they're not willing to put any thought into it.