new song... please critique if you download

[emiller1221]

made in logic pro 7... two guitar tracks, drum track, a clav, and an organ... any critique is appreciated.
http://www.yousendit.com/transfer.php?a ... B8750F7C34

[emiller1221]

oh yea theres a bass track in that also

[emiller1221]

http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm?fu ... =295310301 heres a myspace i created you can check out the song there if you do not wish to download.. its the second one on the list. Please critique

[Banjobach]

You have a pretty spiffy guitar riff going. I'm not a huge fan of the wailing electric soloing but it was well played. I'm mostly a fan of natural noises. The little diddy you play near the end with the harpsichord effect is nice. I would expand on that. The song is pretty short and isn't highly imaginative with its construction. I think if you wanted a more "listenable" song, you should throw in more harmonies or backups to make it less conventional. Just my two cents, but otherwise it was clean playing so
Good Work

[emiller1221]

first of all thanks for the feed back, and yea it is short because it was recorded just as an idea that i had and wanted to get a little feedback about how it was going.. most everything i post is just a short idea for a song that i run with, meaning this song is far from finished, just needed some words of advice to help me out.