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two new originals

Unread post by Dutch » Tue May 29, 2007 12:58 am

two new ones. let me know what you think. and before you crack on the quality of the recording, remember its just throught the pinhole mic on the side of my ibook.

http://www.yousendit.com/download/UVJoc ... Yk0wTVE9PQ

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Unread post by Dutch » Wed May 30, 2007 12:09 am

any words here guys?
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Unread post by ut4ever8 » Wed May 30, 2007 9:35 am

computers going a little slow. but ill give it a listen later tonight
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Unread post by Easy E » Wed May 30, 2007 11:06 pm

first song vocal melody kind fo sounds like the song Voodoo

make the second one an mp3 if you could
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Unread post by Dutch » Thu May 31, 2007 11:42 am

http://download.yousendit.com/93628CDF2A4E1C1F

there ya go
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Unread post by ut4ever8 » Thu May 31, 2007 11:53 am

I like the sound of this one, but it sounds like everything in the background, horns and such, are so loud that its hard to understand the vocals. I like the song itself, just seems like your drowning out the words.
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Unread post by Dutch » Thu May 31, 2007 12:47 pm

ya, im still not really great at mixing. these are still some of my first attempts at having more than like, 2 or 3 tracks.
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Unread post by AustinG » Thu May 31, 2007 7:24 pm

I listened "down to the wire". It's a good idea, and I like all the weird shit at the end.. but a bit to much.

I would suggest taking it somewhere.. that main riff isn't heavy enough to last the whole song.. I suggest throwing in a bridge and a bright chorus..

you've got a nice tone to your voice, I didn't really hear any missed notes, but take it somewhere.. and tone down that harmonica, it's to much the whole song...


First song sounds a lot better than the second. I like how you brought up your voice some on this one... again take them somewhere... definitely like the first better than the second...

lots of potential, keep it up. Sounds perty good for a pinhole mic, tone down the reverb some... buy yourself a nice condenser mic and a pre-amp..
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