Hey guys, I would be grateful if you took the time to read over these lyrics and give some pointers, because by no means am I an insightful lyricist at all. Obviously, I've written this for a lost love of mine. It might be too sappy for most of you, but just written down what's been storming my mind for the past couple months. I'll record the singing/instruments and post it up soon (now that I've got cool edit pro working). Thanks for any critiques!
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(temporarily titled as New York Girl)
V1:
Hey, so good to see you
How have you been? Surviving in this new life
Tall buildings, four seasons,
Hope you found good reasons
To smile and laugh like in the days when
They’d just car-ry on, carry on
Chorus:
You were a flight of stairs, now a flight away
But the miles fly by when you’re
On my mind, love
And you’re never far, when I’ve got you in my heart
These things happen when I fall in love with you
V2.
We drove for miles and for miles
Adventures taking place on those unscripted kind of days
We stood at the top of the world, your eyes
Were brighter than
The lights that were beneath us
Never felt so alive before, before
Chorus
Bridge:
I’ll take a chance to show you
That you’ve bettered the man in me, and
You’re already a star on my Broadway
Come on, I saved a seat
Right here next to me
Let’s see what happens in the end
Outro:
You were a flight away, and now I’m here to say
That it’s you I miss, it’s you I miss
In your aspiring dreams, is there room for me?
Oh cant you see how much you mean to me?
Seeing you is like coming home, a place I’ve always known
You’re my favorite dream
original: new york girl (just lyrics for now)
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